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Dear Sir or Madam

I would like to apply for the post of lifeguard advertised in my student newspaper. Could you send me more information?
I am 16, I had swimming lessons when I was 10. Since then I was exercising at the swimming poll at least twice a week. I also attended civil defence course in my school so I have a knowledge about medical aid techniques.
I am interested in applying for this post as I enjoy working with people, I also consider myself as a reliable person who knows how to react in severe situations. I have no previous employment experience, however, I believe I am the right candidate as I learn fast.
I am free to atend an interview every day after 5 pm.
If you would like any more information, please do not hesitate to contact me on this number: +48666666666.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully,
xyz

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Dear Sir or Madam

I would like to apply for the post of lifeguard as advertised in my student newspaper. Could you send me more information?
I am 16 years old. I took swimming lessons when I was 10. Since then I have exercised at the swimming pool at least twice a week. I also attended a civil defence course in my school, so I have some knowledge about medical aid techniques.
I am interested in applying for this post because I enjoy working with people. I also consider myself a reliable person who knows how to handle an emergency. I have no previous employment experience; however, I believe I am the right candidate because I am a quick learner.
I am free to attend an interview any day after 5 pm.
If you would like any more information, please do not hesitate to contact me at this number: +48666666666.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully,
xyz

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Ale tutaj TEZ sa bledy - ludzie kochani, jak juz robicie za kogos, to prosze robic to bezblednie.