It seemed like James in unexpected moment got some wrinkle [nie wiem co chcesz przez to powiedzieć ale można powiedzieć np.Suddenly the expression of his face changed completely, lub Suddenly his behaviour changed completely.] Straightaway he very seriously hit Rhoda with new idea[[może lepiej HE SHOCKED Rhoda with]]. She WAS GETTING MORE AND MORE AMAZED WITH HIS EVERY WORD. At first she WAS JUST sITTING and listenING TO HIS SPEECH ABOUT COMING WITH NO SERIOUS REASON, MAYBE JUST TO FIND A WAY OF ESCAPNG FROM PROPOSING MARRIAGE TO SOME BORING AND WORTHLESS GIRL. But when he coolED down and came to the end of his small speech she looked AT HIM with HER mouth OPENED. Rhoda FOR A MOMENT LOOKED LIKE a sloth. The woman clam up. She needed ten minutes TO RESPOND AND THE ANSWER WAS “Yes". From this moment they were engaged. It was a big supriSe not only for Rhoda but for James too. IT was A pickup decision nie wiem o co chodzi z tym pickup, ja bym dała np. SPONTANEOUS LUB UNEXPECTED. Even THOUGH NEITHER of them planED this, they were blissfully happy. Rhoda was glad THAT SHE WOULD NO LONGER HAVE TO WORRY ABOUT MONEY or that she Would become a spinster and James was happy JUST TO have it all behind.
When her fiancé went to announce his family the news, Rhoda dropPED down at the sofa and laid on IT UNTIL THE bedtime, thinking about those few hours WHICH CHANGED HER LIFE COMPLETELY.
Niestety nie miałam czasu, żeby bardziej się w to zagłębić i z całą pewnością jest tu jeszcze wiele błędów, których nie widzę albo po prostu nie wiem jak je poprawić. Nie sprawdzałam też wszystkich słów, używasz bowiem trudnych wyrażeń, nie wszystkie jednak w dobrym kontekście;). Ode mnie to tyle, może ktoś jeszcze coś poprawi.