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In today’s world it is said that teens want to be stars. They dreams about pop star, model, film star or sportsmen career. A child superstar’s life, while glamorous in many ways, has its disadvantages and dangers. How really is child’s superstars life? Should people start career in that early age?
At first the life of a child stars is very enviable. They are treated like royalty and grow up in an artificial world, far away from reality. They are able to spend enormous amounts of money at a very young age. Luxury is their everyday companion.
Secondly, child stars life is connected with fame. Kids become an international idols. They are recognized by society. We can see their faces on magazines, in advertisements, in newspapers all over the world, as well.
What is more, superstars career push through changes in children’s life. They have to grow up in a short period of time. They usually become mature and responsible.
However, kids stars have to cope with the problem within a short period of time they earned a huge fortune. Often relatives are putting pressure on them and exploit them.(potrzebuje zmienic to zdanie ale nie wiem jak?) Sometimes ambitious parents try to “earn” money with the talents of their children.
In addition, if children really are successful, problems with greedy relatives are not the only ones. At the first sight enviable lifestyle usually spoiling young star’s character. The dark sides of child stardom can lead to alcoholism, drug addiction, depression and isolation. Nothing can make some young stars happy, especially when they reach their teens.
In many cases child’s superstar career in not long-lasting. It depends on amount of luck because not all child stars become adult stars. Sometimes their career last few seasons and then they have to come back to common life.
Taking all this into consideration …(prosze o pomoc w dopisani podsumowania)
Perhaps it needs the right kind of support from the family to keep child stars from turning into poor little rich kids.

In today's world it is said that teens want to be stars.(twinkle twinkle...jakie stars? film stars? pop stars?) They 'dreams' (nie, I dream, we dream, they dreaM) about BEING A pop star, A model, A film star or 'sportsmen'(to jest l. mnoga-dlaczego?) career.' (nie, nie tak - ...lepiej.. they dream about a career as a pop star...)
'How' WHAT really is A 'child's superstars life' (zrob to inaczej...a superstar child life like?) ? Should people start career 'in' AT 'that' (ale nigdzie nie piszesz jaka to age? 5, 10, 12?) early age?
At first the life of a child 'stars' STAR is very enviable.
Secondly, child star's life is connected with fame. Kids become 'an' (nie uzywamy, gdy mamy l. mn-idols) international idols.
We can see their faces on magazines, in advertisements, in newspapers all over the world, 'as well' (as well as what?...).
However, kids stars have to cope with the problem (daj to tutaj...of having earned a huge fortune) within a short period of time. 'they earned a huge fortune'. Often relatives are putting pressure on them and exploit them.(to zdanie jest ok)
At the first sight enviable lifestyle usually 'spoiling' SPOIL A young star's character.
It depends on THE amount of luck because not all child stars become adult
stars. Sometimes their career lastS JUST A few seasons and then they have to
come back to 'common' (nie, nie to slowo - tutaj EVERYDAY albo NORMAL) life.
Taking all this into consideration (we can summize that a life of a child star can be very tough and perhaps we should not be envious of their lifestyle, as all that comes at a price.)

Jak potrzebujesz wiecej - to mozesz napisac, ze niektorzy (np Shirley Temple Black) robia inne kariery, jak skonczy sie ten mlody etap w ich zyciu. Inni, jak wiemy, nawet niedozyja do 18tki.