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First time I saw John when I was four. I was making a sandcastle in a sandpit when he suddenly became and said: "Hi, I am John. Shall we play together?" It goes without saying that I agreed. From then on we were the best friends ever.
As for his appearance, looking at John it was difficult to believe he was gour because he was rather tall for our age. In addition to having dark, spiky hair he also had tanned complexion. It was because of his father was French. Although John did not all the teeth it his smile was beatiful and charming. It lighted up the whole face. When I met him he was dressed in squared T-shirt and shorts. His trainers were really colourful. It was the most fashionable shoes in that season.
We spent together a lot of time. Not only were we going to the trees but also we were playing in a hide-and-seek. We were never bored. Every minutes a new idea came to uor mind. We built a little house on the tree. But for his father's encouragement we would not have done it. This house is for that day.* When I look at it, I memorise John - my best friend for playing.
I could not imagine better childhood. I wish I met Joh once again some time. I would like my children to have that incredible friend.

This house is for that day. - Ten dom jest do dnia dziesiejszego ?

(brak przedimka) first time I saw John WAS when I was four. I was making a sandcastle in a sandpit when he suddenly 'became' (to jest zle slowo, tutaj CAME) and said: "Hi, I am John.
As for his appearance, looking at John it was difficult to believe THAT he was gour because he was rather tall for 'our' HIS age. In addition to having dark, spiky hair he also had A tanned complexion. 'It' THIS was because of his father WHO was French. Although John did not HAVE all 'the' HIS teeth 'it' (niepotr) his smile was 'beatiful' (ortog) and charming. It lighted up 'the' (lepiej HIS) whole face.
'It' THEY -bo shoes to l. mn) 'was' WERE the most fashionable shoes 'in' (wg mnie niepotr) that season.
We spent 'together a lot of time' (zla kol slow..a lot of...). Not only were we going to the 'trees' (napisz 'forest') but also we were playing 'in a' (niepotr) hide-and-seek.
Every 'minutes' (tu l. poj) a new idea came to 'uor' (ortog) mindS.
This house 'is for' (nie, nie tak...is there till this day) 'that day' (niepotr). When I look at it, I 'memorise' to jest zle slowo, tutaj 'remember'-pamietam) John - my best friend for playing.
I could not imagine A better childhood. I wish THAT I COULD mEet 'Joh' (ortog) once again some time. I would like my children to have 'that' SUCH AN incredible friend.

Dziękuję bardzo :)
a co do 'going to the forest' to zmieniłam na 'climbing trees' bo to miało być, że wspinaliśmy się po drzewach.