Sprawdzenie opowiadania, prosze szybko:)

Witam, zależałoby mi na jak najszybszym sprawdzeniu mojego artykułu ponieważ musze nauczyć się go dobrze opowiadać. Wiem, że może być dużo błędów.. z góry dziękuje za pomoc:)
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I with my friends wanted coach because we was feathery. We had been searching a gym for day finally we found a great place. My friend Piotrek has a Gym so we can practicing every day. That is old private bodybulding gym her brother, but we are beginner packer and that is good for we. Gym is in unused garage. That is mediun-sized room. In this place are some large steely weights. Weights are very heavy but we can little dumbbells too. We can change weight and do practicing on a specially golden machine. In the corner is a table and a leather sofa. Everyone after training can relax. I think that is excellent place where we can meeting and training.

My friends and I wanted to do some weight lifting because we are unfit. We had been searching for a gym for a day when we found a great place. One of my friends, Piotrek, has a gym so now we can exercise there every day. Actually, it's Piotrek's brother's old home bodybuilding gym. Anyway, we've started pumping iron and that's good for us. The gym is in an unused garage. That's a medium-sized room. There, we've got some large, heavy, steel weights. The weights are very heavy, but we can do a little dumbbells. We can also change the weights and exercise on a special golden machine. In the corner, there's a table and a leather sofa. We can relax there after training. I think the gym's an excellent place where we can meet and do sport.

Engee, słuchaj, kto uwierzy, że on sam to napisał? Robił takie błędy, że powinio się mu pokazać, jak poprawić jeden czy dwa, i poczekać, aż je poprawi sam. Powracasz do starych zwyczajów?

raczej nikt nie uwierzy, ze gumispro sam to stworzyl
wytkniecie bledow zajeloby dziesieciokroc tego, co zajelo mi napisanie tego tekstu, w oparciu o to, co mniej wiecej chcial napisac autor tego watku

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