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Proszę o sprawdzenie Opinion Essay na temat: "Czy supermarkety powinny byc otwarte w niedziele?". Z góry dziękuje za pomoc.

Should supermarkets be closed on Sunday?

Nowadays it’s a main topic of public debate. The opinions at this matter are extremly diffrent, but to my mind supermarkets should be closed on this day.

Firstly, Sunday should be a day when the whole family is spending a great time together without Any problems, just parents and their kids. Working in supermarkets on Sunday make it impossible by what people working this day are separated from their family what makes them unhappy. Every know that dissatisfied worker is a bad worker.

Secedly, most people are catholic and in their belief, Sunday should be a day off. This is one of the rule their religion what cannot be broken.

Moreover, for customs Sunday is an another day to spending their money on usless thinks. That same money they could save for something else like holiday or even new car or home.
In my opinion also time spend on shopping is wasted. This time could be used differently for example on walking in the park what could make out health better.

However we are living in democratic society and I think that public voting should give us an answer for this question.

To sum up people hwo think as I do, should do everythink to convice others people to this opinion.

Nowadays 'it’s' (napisz 'this is') a main topic of public debate. The opinions 'at' (zle slowo) this matter are extremly 'diffrent' (blad ortog), but to my mind supermarkets should be closed on this day.

Firstly, Sunday should be a day when the whole family 'is spending' (simple - spends) a great time together without any problems, just parents and their kids. (dobrze, ale co o ludziach ktorzy sa samotni i nie maja dzieci?) Working in supermarkets on SundayS make it impossible 'by what people' (tego nie rozumiem) working this day are separated from their family 'what' (kalka z polskiego 'co', prosze tego nie robic i napisac poprawnie po ang) makes them unhappy. Every (ale co? musisz napisac) 'know' (popraw) that (przedimek) dissatisfied worker is a bad worker.

'Secedly' (ortog, nie rob takich bledow), most people are 'catholic' (nazwa wlasna, duza litera) and in their belief, Sunday should be a day off (a podparcie tego, znaczy np cytac z Biblii). This is one of the 'rule' popraw) (brak slowa) their religion 'what' (zle slowo, popraw) cannot be broken.

Moreover, for 'customs' (zle slowo) Sunday is 'an' (niepotr) another day to 'spending' SPEND their money on 'usless' (ortog) 'thinks' ('thinks' to znaczy 'on mysli'?). That same money they could save for something else like (przedimek) holiday or even (przedimek) new car or (brak 2 slowa) home. (ale przeciez nie mozemy ludziom mowic na co maja wydawac swoje pieniadze)
In my opinion 'also' (niepotr) time 'spend' SPENT on shopping is wasted. This time could be used differently for example on walking in the park 'what' (znowu - popraw i naucz sie odpowiedniego slowa) could make 'out' (zle slowo) health better.

However we are living in (przedimek) democratic society and I think that public voting should give us an answer 'for' (zle slowo) this question.

To sum up people 'hwo' (ortog) think as I do, should do 'everythink' (zle slowo) to 'convice' (ortog) 'others' (zle slowo, tutaj OTHER) people 'to' (zle slowo) this opinion.

(Tutaj dales tylko przeciwne zdanie, a moze tez podaj pozytywne - tzn dlaczego nie maja byc otwarte)