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The sun was shining and the birds were singing when lady Julia called to detective Holmes. She told him that somebody stole her expensive jewerly.
First off he came to her house and started an investigation in this case. When he wanted left Julia house he found some diffrent tire tracks. Detective went for this trail. Night was coming when he arrived to old factory. He decided to going there, but somebody kidnapped detective when he was opening the door. The kidnapper was tall, strong and looked really dangerouse. But he made some mistake. While he was going to toilet, detective Holmes called to the Police Force and told all the story. They arrived fast to this strange place and catched kidnapper.
All the story was happy ending. Lady Julia recovered her jewerly.

The sun was shining and the birds were singing when 'lady' (jak to ma byc 'lady' to DUZA litera, to jest tytul, a jak tylko kobieta to przez nazwisko i stan) Julia called 'to' (niepotr) detective Holmes. She told him that somebody stole her expensive 'jewerly' (blad ortog).
First 'off' (popraw) he came to her house and started an investigation in this case. When he 'wanted left Julia house' (tego nawet nie rozumiem) he found some 'diffrent' (ortog) 'tire' (ortog) tracks. THE detective went for this trail. Night was coming when he arrived to (a gdzie przedimek? uciekl?) old factory. He decided to 'going' GO there, but somebody kidnapped (przedimek) detective when he was opening the door. The kidnapper was tall, strong and looked really 'dangerouse' (ortog). But he made 'some' A mistake. While he was going to (przedimek) toilet, detective Holmes called 'to' (niepotr) the Police Force and told (komu? czemu? musisz napisac) all the story. They arrived 'fast' QUICKLY to this strange place and 'catched' (to jest czasownik niereg - popraw) kidnapper.
All the story 'was' HAD (przedimek) happy ending. Lady Julia recovered her 'jewerly' (ortog).

When he wanted left Julia house[/u] podwójna III forma? o co chodzi w tej części zdania? he found some diffrent tire tracks.
Detective went for this trail. znaczy, że podążył za tym śladem? followed this trail

to te chyba najbardziej rażące błędy.

The sun was shining and the birds were singing when Julia called detective Holmes. She told him that somebody stole her expensive jewerely.
First, he came to her house and started an investigation in this case. When he want left Julia house he found some diffrent 'tire' (dlaczego niepoprawnie?) tracks. Detective fallowed this trail. Night was coming when he arrived to an old factory. He decided to go there, but somebody kidnapped the detective when he was opening the door. The kidnapper was tall, strong and looked really dangerous. But he made a mistake. While he was going to the toilet, detective Holmes called the Police Force and told them all the story. They arrived quickly to this strange place and cought kidnapper.
All the story had happy ending. Julia recovered her jewerely.

Teraz wszystko jest dobrze?

followed*

samo First to za mało, At first, Firstly, ale i First off było dobre, tylko tam zabrakło początkowo przecinka po off
When he want left Julia house -> napisz to po polsku.
tire - może terri chodziło o to, że to AmE? w BrE jest forma tyre.
jewerelly

She told him that somebody stole her expensive jewerly. czas/?/