Short story.

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Anna had a very special reason for getting up early the next day, so she set the alarm for 5 p.m. Excursion she was planning for days with her friends had to unveil the mystery of old forsaken castle. It was said to be haunted by ghosts and nobody wanted to talk about it.
As the alarm resounded in Ann's bedroom she quickly turned it off and jumped out of the bed. It seemed like she couldn't waited for this moment. It took her only a few moments to prepare herself for the adventure. When she heard car horn she snatched her rucksack and run out to join her friends. They set off to the place of their destination.
The building was situaited several dozens from Ann's place. The journey took a few hours so it was midday when they arrived in. They saw rundown castle which was really hideous. It was throwing a sinister shadow which made them feel creepy. Bold friends approached a big wooden door and to their surprise it creaked and opened. Inside there was semi-darkness. Enormous windows were covered in dust so only a few rays of sun came through them. Friends set out to explore the structure. One passage attracted their attention cause they discerned there a scuttle on the ground. They pulled it up and climbed down one by one. Bitterly cold air made them gnashed the teeth. They hardly saw anything but some shadows. Out of the blue a shrill voice muttered something obscurely. First they strucked dumb. Then, engulfed in panic they started yelling and getting away. At last when they managed to escape from the cellar they run straight to the entrance room.
The castle still remain the mystery and friends don't want to recall it. They're utterly panic-stricken when somebody mention the name of the castle. It's out of question for Ann to come there again.
edytowany przez Monka1990: 25 cze 2012
Mógłby ktoś sprawdzić? ;) Dziękuję ;)
Eee, po trzech i pół miesiąca?

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Cytat: Monka1990
Anna had a very special reason for getting up early the next day, so she set the alarm for 5 p.m. PRZEDIMEK Excursion she was CZAS planning for days with her friends had to MUSIALA? unveil the mystery of PRZEDIMEK old forsaken castle. It was said to be haunted by ghosts and nobody wanted to talk about it.
As the alarm resounded in Ann's bedroom she quickly turned it off and jumped out of the bed. It seemed like she couldn't waited ZLA FORMA CZASOWNIKA I CO TO W OGOLE MIALOBY ZNACZYC? for this moment. It took her only a few moments to prepare herself for the adventure. When she heard PRZEDIMEK car horn she snatched her rucksack and run<-TO JEST BEZOKOLICZNIK out to join her friends. They set off FOR USUNIETO their destination.
The building was situaited<ORTOGR several dozen KILKA TUZINOW CZEGO? from Ann's place. The journey took a few hours so it was midday when they arrived in<USUN. They saw PRZEDIMEK rundown castle which was really hideous. It was throwing a sinister shadow which made them feel creepy. THE BRAVE friends approached a big wooden door and to their surprise it creaked and opened. Inside there was semi-darkness. Enormous windows were covered in dust so only a few rays of sun came through them. PRZEDIMEK Friends set out to explore the EDIFICE. One passage attracted their attention BEcause they SAW there a scuttle on the ground. They pulled it up and climbed down one by one. Bitterly cold air made them gnashed ZLA FORMA CZASOWNIKA the teeth. They hardly saw anything but some shadows. Out of the blue a shrill voice muttered something obscurely. First they WERE strucked ZLA FORMA CZASOWNIKA dumb. Then, engulfed in panic SPOWICI PANIKĄ? they started yelling and getting ZACZELI SIE WYDOSTAWAĆ? away. At last when they managed to escape from the cellar they run ZLA FORMA CZASOWNIKA straight to the entrance room.
The castle still remain ZLA FORMA CZASOWNIKA the ZLY PRZEDIMEK mystery and friends don't want to recall it. They're utterly panic-stricken when somebody mention ZLA FORMA CZASOWNIKA the name of the castle. It's out of PRZEDIMEK question for Ann to come there again.

NA TAKIE ZAAWANSOWANE SLOWNICTWO ROBISZ DUZO BLEDOW GRAMATYCZNYCH
Anna had a very special reason for getting up early/EARLIER the next day, so she set the alarm CLOCK for 5 p.m. Excursion she was planning zła kolejnosc slow + przedimek for days KROPKA. SHE AND with her friends had to unveil the mystery of (przedimek) old forsaken castle. It was said to be haunted by ghosts and nobody wanted to talk about it. OK


edytowany przez grudziu: 08 paź 2012
As the alarm resounded in Ann's bedroom, she quickly turned it off and jumped out of the bed. It seemed like she couldn't waited (dlaczego -ed?) for thisTHAT moment. It took her only a few moments to prepare herself for the adventure. When she heard (przedimek) car horn, she snatched her rucksack and run out to join her friends. They set off to/FOR the place of their destination.
W zdaniu z 'when she heard' masz trzy opcje:

albo konstrukcja hear sth do albo wykorzystanie genetive lub of- phrase.

Cytat:
Anna had a very special reason for getting up early the next day
Zwykle, ktos tak piszac, ma na mysli "wczesnie RANO"
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