Napisz opowiadanie o nieprzyjemnym zdarzeniu, które spotkało Twojego przyjaciela

Napisz opowiadanie o nieprzyjemnym zdarzeniu, które spotkało Twojego przyjaciela,
i w konsekwencji którego dokonał niezwykłego odkrycia w okolicy, w której mieszkał.

This version is better ;-) I hope

I'm going to tell you a short story about my friend named Karol. He lived near by Middlesbrought and he didn't expect discover at all as a young boy.

He was 13 years old and he was a good-looking boy who liked having fun, but on the other hand he didn't care about daily problems like adults does. He had a curly blond hear with blue eyes. It started on Monday when he run out of a house and took a walk to the forest. Before he ran out to the forest he had argued with his father named Jerry. It became quite plain to him that he couldn't walk far away from his house, but that day he didn't want to listen his father. He wanted to be alone and didn't want to come back early from that reason that he didn't want to argue with his father again. It was almost the night, but he didn't come back to home. Then suddenly he felt lost and lonely. He was moved because of the father. It was then that he forgot the way back home.Then he saw a black house. He decided to walk away from there, but suddenly he heard screaming. He wanted to find source of the sound so he came closer to the window to look around. He couldn't see anything so he banged to the door. No one appeared so he decided to go in. He was a stranger, but he knew something is going wrong. He went in, but the house seemed to be empty. Then he saw a coin on the ground with text on it "Miirra". It was then that he remembered about the legend that dad used to told him. He was so scared and frightened that he wanted get out of the house and come back to home. He ran out of the house as fast as he could and came back to home when he told what had happened. He couldn't utter even a word, but when he started talking about that his dad thought that he wanted prank him because the legend is forgotten by everyone. No one believed him, but when he showed a coin everyone changed their minds. They all went to the forest and they found the house.

Everyone were surprised of the discover that the president of the Middlesbrought decided award a young boy. He felt good about it, but the pain he went through that night couldn't be compared to a prize he got.

I'm going to tell you a short story about my friend 'named' (niepotr) Karol. He lived near by 'Middlesbrought' (popraw) and he didn't expect (tu cos brak) discover (ale czego, musisz napisac) at all as a young boy.

He was 13 years old and he was a good-looking boy who liked having fun, but on the other hand he didn't care about daily problems like 'adults does' (adults - to jest wiecej jak jeden, dlaczaego dajesz 'does' 3os.l.poj do tego?) . He had 'a' (niepotr) curly blond 'hear' (zle slowo, 'hear' to znaczy sluchaj-) with blue eyes. It ALL started on Monday when he 'run' (popraw) out of 'a' (popraw) house and took a walk to the forest. Before he ran out to the forest he had argued with his father 'named' (niepotr) Jerry. It became quite plain to him that he couldn't walk far away from his house, but that day he didn't want to listen (cos brak) his father. He wanted to be alone and didn't want to come back early 'from that' (zle,popraw) reason that he didn't want to argue with his father again. It was almost 'the' (niepotr) night, but he 'didn't' (zle slowo) come back 'to' (niepotr) home.
house. He decided to walk away from there, but suddenly he heard 'screaming' (zla czesc mowy). He wanted to find (cos brak) source of the sound so he came closer to the window to look around. He couldn't see anything so he banged 'to' (zle slowo) the door.
He was a stranger, but he knew something 'is' (zly czas - przeszly) going wrong.
Then he saw a coin on the 'ground' (moze lepiej floor) with text on it "Miirra". It was then that he remembered about the legend that dad used to 'told' (zle slowo) him. He was so scared and frightened that he wanted (cos brak) get out of the house and come back 'to' (niepotr) home. He ran out of the house as fast as he could and came back 'to' (niepotr) home when he told (ale komu? musisz napisac) what had happened. He couldn't utter even a word, but when he started talking about that his dad thought that he wanted (tu brakuje 3 slowa) prank (cos brak) him because the legend is forgotten by everyone. No one believed him, but when he showed 'a' (THE - bo wiemy ze chodzi o konkretny) coin everyone changed their minds.

Everyone 'were' WAS surprised 'of the' (niepotr) (cos brak) discover that the President of 'the' (niepotr) 'Middlesbrought' (popraw) decided (cos brak) 'award' (zle slowo) 'a' THE young boy. He felt good about it, but the pain THAT he went through that night couldn't be compared to 'a' (THE - bo chodzi o cos konkretnego) prize he got.

Dzięki

Imo nie powienes pisac MONDAY bo to nie ma zadnego powiazania z reszta zdarzenia. Ja bym inacze ujal.

No tak, ale opowiadania raczej wymagają wiele szczegółów, więc staram się pisać jak najwięcej. Przynajmniej tak mi się wydaje.

Nie podajesz w ktorym roku, miesiacu lub dniu miesiaca. Nawet nie podajesz pory roku ani pory dnia. Dlaczego akurat w poniedzialek a nie np jednego dnia. Napisalem to jako sugestie a nie ze jest blad.

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