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Nowadays, many young people are addicted to computer. Using the computer can be danger but it is very useful invention as well.
Firstly, many people especially children and teenagers spend their free time using computers. The more they play on online games the more they are addictive. If they do nothing else expect using computer they should reduce it. What is more, internet may contribute to greater extent addiction. They spend too much time with computer and they forget about other duties. There are many websites which are forbidden for children. Besides that, a lot of people can be addicted to online gambling. They may lose a lot of money. It is shown that addiction cause a lot of different problems.
Moreover people who spend too much time with computer may have a lot of different disorders. For instance, they can have problems with eye. What is more they can be subjects to obesity. It is contribute to heart diseases.
On the other hand, using computer can be very beneficial. People can communicate with friends in easy way. Internet is a source of news, knowledge and entertainment. It is very useful invention because people can do the online purchase. Besides that it is opportunity to do online bank transfer.
To sum up, I must admit that using computer connected with internet can be both danger and useful. People who do not spend too much time with computer and they use it in good purpose, can't be addictive.


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Nowadays, many young people are addicted to (tutaj brakuje przedimka) computer. Using the computer can be 'danger' (zla czesc mowy) but it is (przedimek) very useful invention as well.
The more they play on online games the more they are 'addictive' (zle slowo, to dzieci a nie gry-pomysl). If they do nothing else 'expect' (zle slowo, tutaj 'expect' znaczy 'oczekiwac') using (przedimek) computer they should reduce 'it' (zle nie wiem do czego to 'it' sie odnosi). What is more, internet may contribute to greater 'extent addiction' (tego nie rozumiem). They spend too much time with (przedimek) computer and they forget about other duties.
It is shown that addiction 'cause' (3os.l.poj) a lot of different problems.
Moreover people who spend too much time with przedimek) computer may have a lot of different disorders. For instance, they can have problems with (brak slowa) 'eye' (tylko jednym? myslalam ze z dwoma). What is more they can be 'subjects' n(cos mi to slowo nie pasuje tutaj-)
_ to obesity. It 'is' (niepotr) (napisz 'can') ALSO contribute to heart diseases.
On the other hand, using (przedimek) computer can be very beneficial. People can communicate with friends in (przedimek) easy way. (przedimek) internet is a source of news, knowledge and entertainment. It is (przedimek) very useful invention because people can do 'the' (niepotr) online purchaseS. Besides that, it 'is' (napisz 'offerts') (przedimek) opportunity to do online bank transferS.
To sum up, I must admit that using (przedimek) computer connected with internet can be both 'danger' (zla czesc mowy) and useful. People who do not spend too much time with (przedimek) computer and they use it 'in' FOR (przedimek) good purpose, can't be 'addictive' (zle slowo).

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Nowadays, many young people are addicted to the computer.
Using the computer can be dangerous but it is a very useful invention as well.
For instance, they can have problems with the eyes.
People can communicate with friends in the easy way.
The Internet is a source of news, knowledge and entertainment.
It is a very useful invention because people can do online purchases.

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