Proszę o pomoc przy eseju na jutro.

W aktualnym stanie wygląda on tak. Jako, że nie jestem mistrzem gramatyki, zapewne zawiera sporo pomyłek. Z góry dziękuję za pomoc :)

How to reduce crime rate in the cities?
According to report on the subject of Crime in Poland in 2011 by Ministry of Home Affairs, crime rate is escalating. The report informs that in 2012 in Poland committed 1 159 554 crimes. It is a 1,8 per cent increase in comparison with 2011. Upward tendency is continuing since 2009. Fortunately, there are a number of possible solutions which could inhibit that troublesome process.
One way would be to extension public monitoring network in cities. It is obvious that if potential delinquent know about observing him or her security camera, then will not committed a crime. It will also increase a number of caught criminals red-handed .
When we consider using of technology in the fight with crime it is worth to propose aggrandizement of street lighting. Cleary it will not only minimize inclination to do commit a crime, but on the other hand it will increase sense of security.
Another solution would be increase number of patrolling police. It is important because it help to prevent crimes and deter criminals. Additionally, it causes boost detainees. The research shows that police’ operation betterment has astonishing impact on decrease of transgression. It also prove that crime rate falls away in the trim places, where presumptive damage is quickly repair. Similar effect is achieved by intensification of punishments.
Next good idea is to start looking about young people ethical education. In Poland just few percent of student attend to ethical lesson a chance to do it have just a people who don’t attend to religion lessons. Therefore a lot of schools do not offer ethical lessons what is a big mistake, because young people have not opportunity to learn right behaviour patterns outside family environment. The polish schools neglect civil education which would help student to understand how to be good citizen.
The most effective method of reduce crime rate, however, is fight with problems causing society disaffection, like unemployment, poverty, low wages, high products prices. Due to the fact that preventing with those problems is extremely complex, fulfilment this particular point is hard, but bring the best effects as well.
All things considered, there are many solution to the problem of crimes. The crime rate do not have to increase, and the faster polish government take extra measures, the faster situation should become better.

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How to reduce crime rate in the cities?

According to report on the subject of Crime in Poland in 2011 by Ministry of Home Affairs, crime rate is escalating. The report informs that in 2012 in Poland committed 1 159 554 crimes. It is a 1,8 per cent increase in comparison with 2011. Upward tendency is continuing since 2009. Fortunately, there are a number of possible solutions which could inhibit that troublesome process.

One way would be to extension public monitoring network in cities. It is obvious that if potential delinquent know about observing him or her security camera, then will not committed a crime. It will also increase a number of caught criminals red-handed .

When we consider using of technology in the fight with crime it is worth to propose aggrandizement of street lighting. Cleary it will not only minimize inclination to do commit a crime, but on the other hand it will increase sense of security.

Another solution would be increase number of patrolling police. It is important because it help to prevent crimes and deter criminals. Additionally, it causes boost detainees. The research shows that police’ operation betterment has astonishing impact on decrease of transgression. It also prove that crime rate falls away in the trim places, where presumptive damage is quickly repair. Similar effect is achieved by intensification of punishments.

Next good idea is to start looking about young people ethical education. In Poland just few percent of student attend to ethical lesson a chance to do it have just a people who don’t attend to religion lessons. Therefore a lot of schools do not offer ethical lessons what is a big mistake, because young people have not opportunity to learn right behaviour patterns outside family environment. The polish schools neglect civil education which would help student to understand how to be good citizen.

The most effective method of reduce crime rate, however, is fight with problems causing society disaffection, like unemployment, poverty, low wages, high products prices. Due to the fact that preventing with those problems is extremely complex, fulfilment this particular point is hard, but bring the best effects as well. High life standard will eliminate cause of rubbery, vandalism or struggles bring about frustration, etc.

All in all, there are many solution to the problem of crimes. The crime rate do not have to increase, and the faster polish government take extra measures, the faster situation should become better.

According to (a gdzie jest przedimek?) report (tutaj daj date) on the subject of Crime in Poland 'in 2011' (w zlym miejscu) by (przedimek) Ministry of Home Affairs, crime rate is escalating.

The report informs (kogo? mnie? ciebie? znajomych?) that in 2012 in 'Poland committed' (nie, nie, nie, to nie Polska zrobila, to ludzie ktorzy mieszkaja w Polsce) 1 159 554 crimes. 'It' THIS is a '1,8' (1.8%) per cent increase in comparison with 2011.
(przedimek) Upward tendency 'is' (zly czas) 'continuing' (zmien) since 2009. Fortunately, there are a number of possible solutions which could 'inhibit' (zle slowo) that 'troublesome' (zle slowo) process.
One way would be 'to extension' (pomysl) (przedimek) public monitoring network in (przedimek) cities. It is obvious that if (przedimek) potential delinquent 'know' (on-he-to przeciez 3os.l.poj) about 'observing him' (nie, tu masz zle...being observed) 'or her' (niepotr) (tu brak 2 slowa) security camera, then (kto?co?) will not 'committed' (zly czas) a crime. It will also increase 'a' (zly przedimek) number of 'caught criminals red-handed' (nie, nie wiem jak ty to myslisz, ale widze, ze to jest slowo w slowo z polskiego i wyglada arse over tit.....criminals being caught red-handed) .
When we consider using 'of' (niepotr) technology in the fight 'with' (znowu kalka z polskiego - tutaj AGAINST-przeciwko) crime it is worth 'to propose' (zmien) 'aggrandizement' (zly register) of street lighting. 'Cleary' (ortog) it will not only minimize (przedimek) inclination to 'do' (co to slowo tutsj robi?) commit a crime, but on the other hand it will ALSO increase (przedimek) sense of security.
Another solution would be TO increase (przedimek) number of patrolling police. 'It' THAT is important because it 'help' (ale przeciez 'it' to 3os.l.poj- dlaczego musisz takie rzeczy miec przypominane) to prevent crimes and deter criminals. Additionally, 'it causes boost detainees' (tego to nawet nie rozumiem). The research shows that police operation 'betterment' (daj inne slowo) has (przedimek) astonishing impact on (przedimek) decrease of transgression. It also 'prove' (to juz 3 razi ci przypominam, ze 'it' to 3os.l.poj) that crime rate falls away in the 'trim' (jakie? myslalam ze tylko ludzie sa trim?) places, where presumptive damage is quickly 'repair' (zle slowo). (przedimek) similar effect is achieved by (daj przedimek) intensification of punishments.
(przedimek) next good idea is to start looking 'about' (polska kalka? INTO) 'young people ethical education' (znowu arse over tit...the ethical education of young people). In Poland just few percent of 'student' (chyba l. mnoga) attend 'to' (niepotr) ethical 'lesson' (tylko ta jedna czy wiecej, dlaczego robisz takie glupie bledy?)' a chance to do it have just' (za bardzo ciete, pozmieniaj slowa) a people who don’t attend 'to' (niepotr) religion lessons. Therefore a lot of schools do not offer ethical lessons 'what' (typowa kalka z polskiego, dlacego to wszyscy robia? przecie nie zawsze 'co' jest 'what' w jez. ang!!!) is a big mistake, because young people 'have not' DO NOT HAVE (przedimek) opportunity to learn (przedimek) right behaviour patterns outside (przedimek) family environment. 'The' (niepotr) Polish schools neglect civil education which would help (przedimek) student to understand how to be (przedimek) good citizen.
The most effective method 'of' TO reduce (przedimek) crime rate, however, is TO fight with problems causing society 'disaffection' (zly register), like unemployment, poverty, low wages, high 'products' (niepotr) prices. Due to the fact that preventing 'with' (co to slowo tutaj w ogole robi?) those problems is extremely complex, fulfilment (cos brak) this particular point is hard, but 'bring' (3os.l.poj) the best effects. 'as well' (niepotr)

Serduszko, dlaczego myslisz, ze jestes zwolniony z uzywanie przedimkow? (a, an, the). Przeciez dokladnie wiesz, ze bez tego zdania nie sa gramatyczne. Dlaczego sie ich nie nauczysz raz na zawsze.....(dla mnie niema zadnej przyjemnosci co 2 slowo wpisywac ze tam brakuje przedimka)

All things considered, there are many solutionS to the problem of 'crimes' CRIME. The crime rate doES not have to increase, and the faster (przedimek) Polish government takeS (znowy 3os.l.poj, o ktorej zapominasz) extra measures, the faster (przedimek) situation 'should' WILL become better.

Bardzo dziękuję za pomoc :) Rzeczywiście, często próbuję rozwiązać problem tworząc kalkę i mam problem z przyimkami, szczególnie gdy nie odnoszą się do do przedmiotów. Zdarza mi się je omijać, ponieważ nauczyciel nie zwraca uwagi, gdy nie zostają one użyte podczas wypowiedzi. Nigdy nie wiem co podciągnąć pod "abstrakcję". Co znaczy zły register?
Obecnie praca przedstawia się tak:

The report made by Ministry of Home Affairs shows that in 2012 polish citizens committed 1 159 554 crimes. This is a (1.8%) per cent increase in comparison with 2011. The upward tendency has continued since 2009. Fortunately, there are a number of possible solutions which could de-escalate that acute process.
One way would be to extend a public monitoring network in the cities. It is obvious that if a potential delinquent knows about being observed him by security camera, then he will not commit a crime. It will also increase the number of caught criminals being caught red-handed.
When we consider using technology in the fight against crime it is worth to invest in 'aggrandizement' (zly register) of street lighting. Clearly, it will not only minimize the inclination to commit a crime, but on the other hand it will also increase the sense of security.
Another solution would be to increase a number of patrolling police. That is important because it helps to prevent crimes and deter criminals. Additionally, it may cause the increase arrest rates. The research shows that upswing of police operations has the astonishing impact on the decrease of transgression. It also proves that crime rate falls away in the immaculate places, where presumptive damage is quickly fix. The similar effect is achieved by the intensification of punishments.
The next good idea is to start looking into the ethical education of young people. In Poland just few percent of students attend ethical lessons. Furthermore, that opportunity have only the people who do not attend religion lessons. Therefore a lot of schools do not offer ethical lessons. This is a big mistake, because the young people do not have the chance to learn the right behaviour patterns outside the family environment. Polish schools neglect civil education which would help the student to understand how to be a good citizen.
The most effective method to reduce the crime rate, however, is to fight with problems causing society 'disaffection' (zly register), like unemployment, poverty, low wages, high prices. Due to the fact that preventing those problems is extremely complex, fulfilment of this particular point is hard, but brings the best effects. . High life standard will eliminate causes of rubbery, vandalism or struggles bring about frustration, etc.


All things considered, there are many solutions to the problem of crime. The crime rate does not have to increase, and the faster the Polish government takes extra measures, the faster a situation will become better.

The report made by Ministry of Home Affairs shows that in 2012 Polish (duza litera) citizens committed 1, 159 ,554 crimes. This is a 1.8% increase in comparison with 2011.
Fortunately, there are a number of possible solutions which could de-escalate that 'acute' (calkowicie to slowo tutaj nie pasuje) process.
One way would be to extend 'a' (zly przedimek, i jak tak bedziesz zgadywal....no po co ja sie mecze z tym) public monitoring network in the cities. It is obvious that if a potential delinquent 'knows about' IS AWARE OF being observed 'him' (po co to?) by security camera, then he will not commit a crime. It will also 'increase the number of 'caught' (po co to?) criminals being caught red-handed.
When we consider using technology in the fight against crime it is worth 'to invest' (nie masz pojecia o [czescizh mowy, tu INVESTING in 'aggrandizement' (zly register) of street lighting.

Another solution would be to increase 'a' (no, to mamy efekty nauczyciela ktory czlowieka nie poprawia) number of patrolling police.
Additionally, it may cause 'the' (co to?) increase arrest rates. The research shows that upswing of police operations has 'the' (nie bawie sie z reszta, bo nie masz pojecia o przedimkach.

Dziękuję mimo to.