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Temat :
Write an essay which presents advantages and disadventages of going on holiday with friends your own age rather than with your family.
Although
going on holiday with friends rather than with your family it has a number of
adventages it has also certain drawbacks.
To began with, when you are on your own your parents don’t watch you at every
turn.
What is more you wouldn’t have to ask for a permission and they wouldn’t have
to agree with your opinion. You will be independent, Nobody would nag you to do
anything.
It can be great occasion to organise
time in your own way.
Furthermore you will have to make decisions on your own, and do everything what
would you like to do.
On the other hand these decisions can be irrelevant and sometime miserable in
effects. There could be situations where you would’t remember about
consequences.
As for money, your parents would not sponsor your conceits, and if you would
not dispose your allowance reasonably it will be only your problem and no one more.
Moreover your parents will probably make you go sightseeing, instead of dancing
in the disco and only having fun with your friends, you will reach some
valuable knowledge about places, culture etc.
What is more, usually you don’t have more time to spend with your parents, it
would be fantastic time to change these.
To recap , going in holiday on your own has positive and also negative aspects.
In my opinion, sometimes parents don’t give their children enough freedom and
holidays are great occasion to do that and also take a break from each other.
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