Juvenile delinquency- essay

Proszę o sprawdzenie poniższej pracy:

The latest research shows that the problem of juvenile delinquency increased in last few years. It is distressing behavior which has undoubtedly a negative influence on the entire society. Therefore, the government and police should steadily look at this case.
Firstly, unacceptable behaviours of young people for instance an ability to committing the crime, resorting to violence, alcohol or drugs abusing are result from the lack of attention of parents. A parents' duty is to teach and explain their children what behaviours are wrong and illegal. So as to overcome this problem, parents should devote more attention their children or to contact with a good psychologist. Besides, juvenile delinquents should take a responsibility of their bad behaviour and bear severe consequences of it.
On the other hand, adolescents are often involved in crimes because of their difficult financial situation. What an example is a large number of shoplifting and muggings. Some experts claim that young people do it in order to being accepted by other peers. A possible way to deal with this problem would be introducing by the government a program of supporting unemployed parents. This program could guarantee a state benefit or other source of income for family.
Taking everything into consideration, the problem of juvenile delinquency is serious and worrying. The reason for this is the lack of parents’ attention or difficult financial situation. However, both parents as the government should seek effective solutions to deal with the problem of crime among young people.

The latest research shows that the problem of juvenile delinquency HAS increased in (brak przedimka) last few years.
behavior - Ame, behaviour - BrE - nie mieszaj
Firstly, unacceptable behaviours of young people for instance 'an' THE ability to 'committing' (comit) the crime, resorting to violence, alcohol or 'drugs' (tutaj l. poj) 'abusing' (abuse) are (brak przedimka) result 'from' OF the lack of attention of parents. A parents' duty is to teach and explain (cos brak) their children what behaviours are wrong and illegal. So as to overcome this problem, parents should devote more attention (cos brak) their children or 'to' (niepotr- cos masz problemy z tym gdzie daje sie 'to' a gdzie nie) contact with a good psychologist. Besides, juvenile delinquents should take 'a' (zly przedimek, tutaj THE) responsibility of their bad behaviour and bear severe consequences 'of' (from) it.
'What' (kalca z polskiego 'co' ale jest zle) an example is a large number of shoplifting and muggings. (to nie jest dokladnym zdaniem).
Some experts claim that young people do it in order to being accepted by 'other' (nie, to tutaj nie pasuje, lepiej 'their') peers. A possible way to deal with this problem would be 'introducing' (tu masz zle, trzeba..the introduction) by the government OF a programME of supporting unemployed parents. This programME could guarantee a state benefit or other source of income for (brak przedimka) family.
However, both parents as WELL AS the government should seek effective solutions to deal with the problem of crime among young people.

Dziękuję bardzo.