Proszę o wskazanie błędów w eseju for and against.

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Should military service be compulsory?
Nowadays citizens want to feel safely in the country, which provide proper amount of the military force. The statistics say that the number of counties which limited or turn away compulsory military services is growing. There are opponents who claim that the military service should be obligatory with no exceptions.
First of all, those who believe that the military service should be compulsory maintain that thisservice is very valuable because young people can learn a discipline and rules which are common it thearmy. Additionally they think that suchservices form responsible and courage adults.
Moreover, people who support this ideaare convinced that the military service is right because in case of warthearmy have sufficient amountof solders. What is more, the recruits are highly qualified after military service.
Nevertheless, there arepeople who persuade that thisdecision should be voluntary for instance for people who refuse the military service due to theirbelieves. They claim that the compulsory military service is unfair and break their rights.
Furthermore, opponents say that candidates for the military service should have special features as a courage, strength and mentally resistance. They believe that not everyone is able to undergo through themilitary service.
Take everything into consideration, it is visible that there are arguments for and against thecompulsory military service. Everyone has ownopinionabout this issue and a lot depend on thesystem in the particular country.
Czy może ktoś pomóc w sprawdzeniu?
Tak na szybko. Jest kilka złych form czasownika jak np.:
in the country, which provide??? ...
the army have???
Itp.
Brak kilku przedimków np;
...after ??? military service.
Inne błędy:
citizens want to feel safe ly...
countRies which ?limited??? or turn away ..
...young people can learn a discipline
should have special features QUALITIES/CHARACTERISTICS, SUCH as a courage, ...
ble to undergo through the military service.
edytowany przez argazedon: 15 paź 2014
Nowadays citizens want to feel 'safely' (zle slowo) in 'the' (zle slowo) country, which 'provide' (zle slowo) 'proper' (zle slowo) amount of 'the' (niepotr) military force. The statistics say that the number of counties which limited or turn away (brak slowa) compulsory military services is growing. There are opponents who claim that 'the' (niepotr) military service should be obligatory with no exceptions.
First of all, those who believe that 'the' (niepotr) military service should be compulsory (cos brak) maintain that this service is very valuable because young people can learn 'a' (niepotr) discipline and rules which are common 'it' (zle slowo) the army. Additionally they think that such services form responsible and 'courage' (zle slowo) adults.
Moreover, people who support this idea are convinced that 'the' (niepotr) military service is right because in case of war the army 'have' (zle slowo) sufficient amountof solders.
Nevertheless, there are people who 'persuade' (zle slowo) that this decision should be voluntary for instance for people who refuse 'the' (niepotr) military service due to their 'believes' (zle slowo). They claim that 'the' (niepotr) compulsory military service is unfair and 'break' (zle slowo) their rights.
Furthermore, opponents say that candidates for 'the' (niepotr) military service should have special features (brak slowa) as 'a' (niepotr) courage, strength and 'mentally' (zle slowo) resistance. They believe that not everyone is able to undergo through 'the' (niepotr) military service.
'Take' (niepotr) everything into consideration, it is visible that there are arguments for and against 'the' (niepotr) compulsory military service. Everyone has (cos brak) own opinion about this issue and a lot depend on the system in 'the' (ja dalabym inny przedimek) particular country.
Dzięki za wszelkie uwagi.
to undergo something a nie "...through"
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