>>>Jak juz podejmujesz sie robienia poprawek, uwzgledniajac wskazowki ktore ja napisalam, to prosze robic to
solidnie. Prosze nie ignorowac tego co napisalam - bo ja nie za bardzo jestem chetna do tracenia czasu i do poprawianie tych samych bledow, ktore juz byly wskazane.
In response to the (tutaj brakuje 'job') posted on the site pracuj.pl XXX on XXX job as a job I would like to submit an application.
'I am happy to show' (lepiej moze ' I consider') that I have the necessary individual predisposition to take employment in the post XXX
My main tasks 'in previous work' (niepotr- bo to jest wiadome) 'had to be' (zly czas, tutaj WERE) AS A 'subordinate' (nie za bardzo trafne slowo, nie wiem co masz na mysli i o co tutaj chodzi) to 'the' (niepotr) management of shops and achieving 'the' (niepotr) goals set by the management.
'In recent work' (niepotr) 'to analyze' (ale kto to robil? Ja ty, to musisz napisac...I analyzed...) sales data and the levels of achievement of key performance indicators such as the efficiency of working time, sickness absenteeism, 'loss' (jaki loss? - dokladniej).
In my 'second and' (niepotr) last job I was responsible for internal documentation and its delivery to the relevant departments.
My biggest achievement 'in the last job' (niepotr) 'is' (zly czas - to bylo w przeszlosci) 'to prepare' (the preparation of) two projects showing recovery plans through which it 'is' (zly czas) possible to improve the 'bad' (calkowicie zle slowo, chyba myslisz o 'weak' procedures within the company) company procedures
'A lot' (to jest za niskie okreslenie, napisz cos formalnego) of experience and skills gained...(calkowicie arse over tit- zla kolejnosc slow, jak juz o tym pisalam) during 'When I was' (niepotr) MY self- employment (ale cos tutaj nie za bardzo tego lapie - jak pracowales, to nie bylo self-employment)-at the time of this work, I was responsible for the 'conduct' (zle slowo) of tax revenue and expense ledger and (brak przedimka) analysis of sales data. 'such as sales, loss, profit margins' (napisz to jakos inaczej). I was also responsible for 'keeping' (za niskie slowo, tutaj moze 'the maintenance') of the company'S budget (lepiej jest napisac...for overseeing the company's budget)
In the future I would like to work in the financial sector because I can develop my skills and learn new skills. (zdanie jest ok, ale nie wiem dlaczego to ma ich obchodzic - to jest twoja sprawa)
I want to increase my chances of employment in the financial sector SO in October 2013 I started postgraduate studies in Controlling and Audit at the University of XXX.
During postgraduate studies I learn to 'enterprise' (zle slowo, tutaj moze 'interpret') ratio analysis, financial reporting, measurement and billing costs in 'the' AN enterprise and 'operational budgeting' (dlaczego dales to na koncu, jak to jest prawie najwazniejszy punkt. To musi byc gdzies w zdaniu).
My 'advantage'(powyzej napisalam ze to jest zle slowo, to dlaczego dalej to samo wpisujesz, czy myslisz, ze jak drugi raz przeczytam to slowa 'cudem' zrobi sie dobre - nie, nie - poszukaj inne) is that I can think analytically, I am responsible and I can achieve 'our' (nie, to jest zle - to nie sa 'moje i twoje' lepiej napisz ...'any set') goals. 'Very well I handle data analysis' (chyba nie umiesz czytac po polsku - wyzej napisalam ze to jest zle, prosze nie ignorowac moich poprawek, bo to mnie po prostu troche wk..., denerwuje), AND I willingly take ON ANY new challenges.
....If you are interested in my skills and qualifications will be happy to be presenting my candidacy during a personal meeting....Napisalam powyzej, ze po ang. to nikt tak nie napisze, lepiej jest napisac tak jak byles uczony...I am available for an interview at any time to suit you and I look forward to hearing from you in due course..