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Proper eating is very important in the period of maturation. Properly balanced diet and eating habits have big influence on later stage of life. Research shows that diet of examined students is correctly arranged.
Main goal of my BA Thesis was checking students eating habits and also determining eating mistakes committed by respondents.
Research was performed among 32 students attending to Adam Mickiewicz secondary school in Turośl. Respondents age 14 and 15 years. 17 of examined students ware boys and 15 ware girls. The questionnaire was performed anonymously and contained 19 questions. The questions were of closed type and referred to dietary habits. Respondents have also rated their diets by themselves.
Basing on analysis of the results it was concluded that students eat rationally. Most of them eat five meal during the day and supply themselves with necessary nutrients.
Most common mistakes committed by students applied to eating between meals, excessive sweets consumption and excessively fast food consumption.
Eating habits acquired at home and at the school often have influence on the later lives of young people. Eating habits should be shaped according to healthy eating rules from early age
That kind of behavior brings benefits in stage of learning student will be:
- more mentally efiicient,
- more active
and it grown up life:
- lowers propability of getting disasses related to diet,
- it allows to stay healthy.

Proper eating is very important in the period of maturation

Niestety, po raz kolejny ucielo moje poprawki. Podziekuj adminsitratorom.

'Proper' (nie za bardzo trafne slowo, niema czegos takiego jak 'improper' eating) eating is very important in the period of maturation. (brak przedimka) properly balanced diet and eating habits have (przedimek) big influence on later stage of life. Research shows that 'diet of examined students is correctly arranged' (tego nie rozumiem).
(przedimek) main goal of my BA Thesis was checking students eating habits and also determining eating mistakes committed by (przedimek) respondents.
Research was performed among 32 students attending 'to' (zle slowo, tutaj THE) Adam Mickiewicz secondary school in Turośl. Respondents age WAS 14 and 15 years. 17 of (przedimek) examined students 'ware' (zle slowo, tutaj WERE) boys and 15 'ware' WERE) girls. The questionnaire was performed anonymously and contained 19 questions. The questions were of (przedimek) closed type and referred to dietary habits. Respondents 'have' (calkowicie niepotr) also rated their diets by themselves.
BasED on (przedimek) analysis of the results it was concluded that students eat rationally. Most of them eat five mealS (l. mnoga) during the day and supply themselves with (przedimek) necessary nutrients.
Most common mistakes committed by students applied to eating between meals, excessive sweets consumption and excessively fast food consumption.
Eating habits acquired at home and at the school often have influence on the later lives of young people. Eating habits should be shaped according to healthy eating rules from (przedimek) early age
That kind of behavior brings benefits in (przedimek) stage of learning. (przedimek) student will be:
- more mentally 'efiicient' (ortog),
- more active
and 'it' (zle slowo) grown-up life :
- lowers propability of getting 'disasses' (ortog) related to diet,
- it allows (komu? czemu?) to stay healthy.

Dla mnie to jest bardzo, z bardzo slabo. Nie zacheca mnie do czytania. Powinnienes napisac CEL tego, to znaczy jaki miales hypothesis, co myslales...i wtedy czy to sie zgadzalo z twoja opinia. Popatrz na inne tematy - to powinno zachwycac, a nie byc tak napisane, jak na 'odczep sie'.....

@mg
gdyby mi tak ucinało, to bym skopiował to co napisałem i wklejał aż do skutku

Research shows that diet of examined students is correctly arranged - miało oznaczać: Badania dowodzą, że dieta ankietowanych uczniów jest prawidłowo ułożona.

the diet of the examined students is well-balanced

Poprawiłam przedimki. Nie jestem pewna czy poprawnie, proszę jeszcze raz o poprawę.
Eating is very important in the period of maturation. A properly balanced diet and eating habits have a big influence on later stage of life. Research shows that 'diet of examined students is correctly arranged' ( nie wiem jak to poprawić).
The main goal of my BA Thesis was checking students eating habits and also determining eating mistakes committed by the respondents.
Research was performed among 32 students attending the Adam Mickiewicz secondary school in .Respondents age was 14 and 15 years. 17 of the examined students were boys and 15 were girls. The questionnaire was performed anonymously and contained 19 questions. The questions were of the closed type and referred to dietary habits. Respondents had also rated their diets by themselves.
Based on the analysis of the results it was concluded that students eat rationally. Most of them eat five meals during the day and supply themselves with a necessary nutrients.
Most common mistakes committed by students applied to eating between meals, excessive sweets consumption and excessively fast food consumption.
Eating habits acquired at home and at the school often have influence on the later lives of young people. Eating habits should be shaped according to healthy eating rules from a early age
That kind of behavior brings benefits in a stage of learning the student will be:
- more mentally eficient
- more active
and in (będzie dobrze?) grown-up life :
- lowers propability of disease related to diet,
- it allows to students to stay healthy.

Troche to zmienilam, zeby to mialo rece i nogi i wygladalo, ze cos wartosciowego zrobilas....

(mozna tutaj dodac ...A well 'balanced') 'eating' (daj slowo 'diet') is very important in the period of maturation (tutaj przydaloby sie imie/nazwisko jakiegos naukowca na ten topic) , 'A properly balanced diet and eating habits' (tego nie potrzeba, ale daj ...which haS aN IMPORTANT 'big' (znowu to 'big - niepotrzebne) influence on later stage of life.
(According to xxx -imie naukowca) eating habits acquired at home and at 'the' (niepotr) school often have A GREAT influence on the later lives of young people, and ACCORDINGLY they should FOLLOW healthy eating rules from a early age

The main goal of my BA Thesis was 'checking' (nie, daj slowo 'establishing') students eating habits and 'also' (niepotrzebne slowo) determining eating mistakes 'committed' (za silne slowo, wystarczy 'made') by the respondents.
Research was performed among 32 students attending the Adam Mickiewicz secondary school in XXXX. The 32 students were aged 14 and 15 OF WHICH 17 were boys and 15 were girls.
Research took the form of an anonymous questionnaire...'The 'questionnaire was performed anonymously' (niepotr) and contained 19 CLOSE-TYPE questions referrING to dietary habits. Respondents had also rated their diets by themselves.

Based on the analysis of the results it was concluded that students eat rationally, AS it appears that their diets are well-balanced. Most of them eat five meals during the day 'and' WHICH supply 'themselves' THEM with THE necessary VITAMINS and nutrients.
HOWEVER, most common mistakes committed by students applied to eating between meals, excessive sweets consumption and excessively fast food consumption.

(tutaj mam problem z tym akapitem, bo to nie jest based on research, tylko twoje widzimisie...Trzeba to podpierac literatura - pracami na ten subject....
It is well-established by learned dieticians such as XXX and medical professionals, including research by XXXXX that a well-balanced diet brings ENORMOUS benefits in aNY stage of learning WhICH RESULTS IN THE STUDENT BEING:
- more mentally eficient
- more active (physically czy tylko mentally)
and in 'grown-up' ADULT life A GOOD DIET:
- GREATLY lowers THE propability AND POSSIBILITY OF DIETARY RELATED disease,
- 'it allows to students to stay healthy' (to zdanie nic nie znaczy, tutaj trzeba wiecej naukowo napisac....to ja sama wiem, i nie musialam zadnej research dokonywac.)

Ja to tak widze.

it allows (bez ' to" ).

np . it simply allows most of our students to lead healthy lifestyle and being highly .... na przyklad :)

co to znaczy 'being highly'? tylko 'to be healthy' bedzie tu poprawne

to znaczy to co moze byc napisane potem ,...ale to juz jest inwencja syl 9876.. dlaczego tylko to "to be healthly ' jest poprawne? a " it just allows " już nie ??

it simply allows most of our students to lead a healthy lifestyle and (to) be healthy

or to " remain healthy for as long as possible , so we should do our best to benefit from that "