Bardzo proszę o poprawę błędów.

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Proszę o poprawę błędów i ewentualne sugestie. Poniżej przedstawiam treść zadania:
"You are part of a research group which has asked young offenders, as part of their community service, to help raise money for charity. You have been asked to write a report about the project. You should include:
- information about the purpose of the project
- techniques used fot raising money
- what happened as a consequence of the project
Add a conclusion."

REPORT ON CHARITY WORK BY YOUNG OFFENDERS

Introduction
The aims of this report are:
1) to show positive effect that charity work can invoke
2) to comment on young criminals' commitment
3) to help people change their life and give a second chance
This report is based on research group members' observation during the happening and interviwed with participants.

Methods of fundrising
Young offenders were asked to raise money for the charity as part of their community service. They decided to act by doing the following steps:
- to organise jumble sale
- to persuade passers-by to give some money to collection boxes
- to auction items which charity got from benefactors

Results
During severals days of raising money the final outcome was satisfying. Not only $300 was raised but also the young offenders did something positive. Some of them had picked up litter before and they say that work for helping others is far more rewarding.

Conclusion
To summarise, it is worth organising such events because they provide important life skills:
- teach how to be part of society
- encourage young offenders to change their life
Moreover, the funds that were raised help people in need.

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lepiej: voluntary work is far ...
REPORT ON CHARITY WORK BY YOUNG OFFENDERS

Introduction
The aims of this report are:
1) to show PRZEDIMEK positive effect that charity work can invoke PRODUCE
2) to comment on young criminals' commitment
3) to help people change their life LIVES, BO KAŻDY MA SWOJE ŻYCIE and give KOMU a second chance
This report is based on research group members' observation during the happening and interviwed with participants.TO JUZ ZOSTALO SKOMENTOWANE

Methods of fundrising ORTOGR.
Young offenders were asked to raise money for the BRAK NAZWY charity as part of their community service. They decided to act by doing the following steps:
- to organise PRZEDIMEK jumble sale
- to persuade passers-by to give some money to collection boxes DAĆ PIENIĄDZE PUDEŁKOM?
- to auction items which THE charity got LEPIEJ 'HAD RECEVIED' from ITS benefactors

Results
During DURING NIE PASUJE DO FINAL severals days of raising money the final outcome was satisfying. Not only NOT ONLY NA POCZATKU ZDANIA WYMAGA INWERSJI $300 was raised but also the young offenders did something positive. Some of them had picked up litter before and they say CZEMU CZ. TERAZNIEJSZY that work for helping others is far more rewarding.

Conclusion
To summarise, it is worth organising such events because they provide important life skills:
- teach KOGO how to be part of society
- encourage young offenders to change their life ZNOWU: LIVES
Moreover, the funds that were raised help people in need. MOWISZ O KONKRETNYCH FUNDUSZACH Z KONKRETNEJ AKCJI, A POTEM UZYWASZ PRESENT SIMPLE, KTORY DOTYCZY UOGOLNIEN.

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