Bardzo proszę o sprawdzenie

Bardzo proszę o sprawdzenie. Wiem że tekst jest długi ale jeśli ktoś mógłby choć troszeczkę rzucić na to okiem byłabym bardzo wdzięczna.

Nowadays we live in very hard times and foremost in times in which many situations are preposterous and incomprehensible. The vast majority of young people do not realize that knowledge is one of the most important factor which decide about their future. Appropriate skills which we obtain during our education make our life easier and conveniently. I strongly believe that if we cares about that another people count with our opinion, knowledge and some abilities will be indispensable for us.
Firstly, very often people reach for professional advice to someone who they know that has proper knowledge. If we know a lot we can help another people and what is more we can impact for decision this people. They trust us and believe that we give them right answer. Sometimes we can use this fact to our benefit. Somebody who ask us for advice in return can give us something what we need.
Secondly, doctor, lawyer, teacher, politician have professional knowledge which let them give decisive opinion in some situation. It contribute to that society trust this people. Their work is connected with take a very significant decision which have influence to other people life. The knowledge which they possess decide that they are influential people so thanks to it they feel confidence and don have any problem which they can not tackle.
On the other hand, there are immense number of people who have intrinsic aptitude and skills which make that they know how to influence to another people. They can cope with some problems without professional knowledge but by their confidence and intrinsic gift. They possess knowledge which is not obtain during school education but in spite of this fact their skills are enough for them to manage in life. Regardless of their education people count with their advice and opinion because they appear to be very smart.
While, undeniably, knowledge is power which appropriate use can be useful and significant in our life. We can use our abilities to gain some benefits. Accomplishment exert an influence on another people give us opportunity to avoid impact's people from surroundings. Knowledge let us that we feel independently, more confidence and decision which we take are rightly with certainty. We have knowledge so we have power and we can influence the other.

Nowadays we live in very hard times and 'foremost in times' (tego tutaj nie rozumiem) in which...
.. one of the most important factorS which decide about their future. Appropriate skills which 'we' (tzn young people?) obtain during our education WILL make our life easier and 'conveniently' (nie, jak juz to lepiej 'convenient' - ale to jest zle slowo tutaj). I strongly believe that if we carE about 'that' (to jest niepot) 'another' (lepiej OTHER) people count with our opinion,..(to zdanie cos nie tak.. troche sie zgubilam w nim)
Firstly, very often people reach for professional advice to someone
whoM they know that has 'proper' (nie, lepiej appropriate, adequate, substantial, wide) knowledge. If we know 'a lot' (to kolokw) we can help OTHER people and what is more we can impact ON 'THE decision OF thESE (l. mnoga-bo people) people' (mozna tez on their decisions). They trust us and believe that we WILL give them THE right answer.
Somebody who askS us for advice in return..
Secondly, A doctor, lawyer, teacher OR A politician have professional
knowledge which let them give decisive opinion in some situationS. 'It' (lepiej THIS)contributeS to thE FACT THAT society trustS 'this' (THESE) people. Their work is connected with takING 'a' (bez 'a') very significant decisionS which have influence ON other people'S liVES. The knowledge which they possess decideS that they are influential 'people' (moze to niepotr tutaj) so thanks to THIS they feel confidenT and don'T have any problemS which they can not tackle.
..number of people who have intrinsic aptitude and skills which make 'that' 'they' (tutaj THEM) know how to influence 'to' (niepotr) OTHER people. They can cope with some problems without professional knowledge 'but' (jabym tutaj dala 'JUST BY') their confidence and intrinsic gift.
They possess knowledge which is not obtainED during school education.. Regardless of their education people 'count' (moze lepiej 'rely on their') 'with their' advice..
While, undeniably, knowledge is power which WITH appropriate use can be
useful and significant in our life, (tutaj cos brakuje-jak uzywasz while..to oczekujemy drugiej strony argumentu)
Accomplishment exertS an influence on OTHER people WHICH giveS us AN opportunity to avoid 'impact's'(nie, THE impact on) people from THEIR surroundings.
Knowledge 'letS us' (lepiej allows us to feel) independent, more confidenT and
ANY decision which we take are 'rightly with certainty' (zla kolejnosc slow lepiej certain to be right). 'We have' (moze lepiej By having) knowledge we have power so that we can influence the other PERSON.

Many situations are 'preposterous' (niewiem czy to jest wlasciwy odpowiednik slowa 'niepojetych') and incomprehensible.
I strongly believe that knowledge is power AND thanks to it we (get over) CAN OVERCOME MANY hard situations.
It is due to our knowledge (mozna tez wisdom) that we can have greater influence on other people.