opinion essay - proszę o sprawdzenie

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Temat: "Technological progress is a threat to human race"
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We can not stop the technological progress. It has many positive and negative effects in the world.
I think it is not a threat to human race.
In the beginning we need to know, that owing to technology people can do many things without
leaving their homes. It is dangerous especially for children and teenagers. People in that age usually
spend more time chatting and surfing by Internet than face to face contact. It leads to many problems
and mental diseases like depression, isolation and addiction to computers. What is more, technological progress
controls a military aspect. New high-tech weapons are very dangerous. One bomb can destroy all planet.
On the other hand, technological progress can save many lifes. Science and medicine progress leads to
cure majority of diseases. Humans life lenght increased. Morover, life seems to be easier than in the past.
We have many facilities, machines and computers do more and more things without humans contribution.
Furthermore, transport is better and faster than never before. We can travel over all continents.
All things considered, technological progress is not a threat to human race. It is a big chance to
us, so we must take advantage of it.
We can not stop 'the' (bez the) technological progress.
I think it is not a threat to human race because....(dlatego, ze ...)
In the beginning we need to 'know' (moze lepsze slowo - realize),that owing to..
'It' (ale co?) is dangerous especially for children and teenagers because...). People AT that age usually spend more time chatting and surfing THE Internet than IN face to face contact. 'It' (lepiej 'This') leads to many problems
What is more, technological progress 'controls a military aspect' (zla kolejnosc slow - is an aspect controlled by the military?).
One bomb can destroy THW WHOLE planet.
On the other hand, technological progress can save many 'lifes' (nie, LIVES,- l. poj-life, l. mnoga-lives).
Science and 'medicine progress' (zla kol. slow - progress in medicine) leads to THE curING OF THE majority of diseases. 'Humans life' (zla kol. slow - The life of a human has increased in length)lengTH increased. MorEover, life...
We have many facilities, machines and computers TO do more and more
things without 'humans contribution' (any human contribution).
...progress is not a threat to THE human race. It is a big chance FOR us, so ..
cannot (can't), nie: can not
mozna i tak i tak: can't, can not, cannot
A mi zawsze wpajano do głowy, że tylko i wyłącznie cannot (can't). ;p Ale rzeczywiście: http://tinyurl.com/t7bdo.

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