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First week of my holidays I spend at home. My cousine with his family arrived. He has got small son, wich I was make to take care. When they come back to their life i started my first serious work in my whole life. I was saleswoman in…………………….(sklep ze sprzętem agd i rtv) in X. I lerned how to talk with customers and subconsious persuade them to do shopping in my shop. I allocated my first salary in 5-days trip to Pieniny with my boyfriend. We stayed in my father-in-law in future hotel. We were sightseeing a lot. One day we ascented the pick of Pieniny – Trzy Korony. It was exhausting but very impressive experience. I returned home with heart full of joy. Then I started serious work in my aunt’s new house. I painted house outside, becouse it is made from wood. Inside, I lerned how to install panneling, paint walls. In last week my ount from Italy arrived. We couldn’t under stand with her family as they don’t speek Polish. Happily, they were very quick-witted students and after week they understood us without any problem.
My holidays were really tiresome and I did not have even time for rest and sunbathing. I wish my next holidays would be more relaxing but also full of adventure.

First week of my holidays I SPENT at home. My COUSIN ARRIVED with his family. He has got small son. I took care him. (tak proponuję) When they CAME back to their life I started my first serious work in my whole life. I was saleswoman in ELECTRONIC SHOP in X. I LEARNED/LEARNT how to talk with customers and SUBCONSCIOUSLY PERSUADED them to do shopping in my shop. I allocated (zamiast tego proponuję SPENT) my first salary in 5-DAY trip to Pieniny with my boyfriend. We stayed in my father-in-law in THE MODERN hotel. (masz chłopaka i teścia jednocześnie? "future hotel"-chodzi Ci o to, że nowoczesny?) We WENT sightseeing a lot. One day we ascented the PEAK in Pieniny - Trzy Korony. It was exhausting, but very impressive experience. I returned home with heart full of joy. Then I started serious work in my aunt's new house. I painted house outside, becouse it is made OF wood. Inside, I LEARNED/LEARNT how to install panneling, paint walls. In THE last week ARRIVED my AUNT from Italy. We couldn't UNDERSTAND (bez "with") her family, BECAUSE they don't SPEAK Polish. Happily, they were very quick-witted students and after week they understood us without any problem.
My holidays were really tiresome and I did not have (bez even brzmi lepiej) time for rest and sunbathing. I wish my next holidays WILL be more relaxing but also full of adventure.


W moim "poprawionym" tekście na pewno też są błędy, ale chyba jest trochę lepszy niż Twoja wersja. Przynajmniej taką mam nadzieję. Pozdrawiam. :)

electronics shop*

Wielkie dzieki:* Wiekszość błędów, jak tak teraz czytam, to błędy zrobione z pośpiechu ale dziękuje ze i takie poprawiłaś/es. A z tym teściem to że przyszły teść, nie przyszły/nowoczesny hotel :) Nie wiedziałam jak to ując :)

He has got small son. I took care him.

...a small son. I took care OF him.

When
>they CAME back to their life

Może lepiej When they went back home...

>>I was saleswoman in ELECTRONIC SHOP in X.
... a saleswoman in an....

I allocated (zamiast tego proponuję SPENT) my
>first salary in 5-DAY trip to Pieniny with my boyfriend.

....on a five-day trip...

We stayed in
>my father-in-law in THE MODERN hotel.

We stayed at my father-in-law's modern hotel.

>with heart full of joy.
...a heart

becAuse gdzieś tam jest napisane z "o"

>and after week
after a week..
nie wiem tylko co quick-witted my wspolnego z ich umiejętnością zrozumienia was

Autorka zeznaje, że na razie nie ma teścia, więc "at my future father-in-law's hotel"

A bez 'a' i 'the' da się przeżyć, ale tekst brzmi b. obco. Może więc dodam jeszcze: AN exhausting experience, I painted THE house