Money ( bez THE) HAS been used for AGES. People invented it because EXHANGING GOODS for GOODS was very bothersome. Nowadays money IS A common legal tender. IT IS like health (bez A) ; when we DO NOT HAVE IT we are unlucky, but when we have IT we ARE not always joyful. So do the money help us to be happy?
Firstly, money IS necessary TO exist. Secondly, money MAKES IT possible TO learn and RELAX. Moreover, thanks to IT we can FULFIL our dreams. We can buy a beautiful house and an up-to-date car AS WELL AS HAVE an unusual journey.
MOREOVER, it is SOMETHING which DECIDES ON OUR social standing. Rich PEOPLE HAVE easier life than poor ONES.
But on the other hand, THE poor OFTEN SEEM to be happier than THE rich. And what's more, many of them are EGOISTIC and selfish.
Wealth doesn't help enough, BECAUSE we cannot BUY health, friendship or love for money. Although rich people have so much money, they aren't happy. There are many stars who DO NOT HAVE A SUCCESSFUL marriage.
They also SPEND their money on harmful things SUCH AS BAD HABITS which CAN CAUSE cancer or DRUG ADDICTION . Even though they have A LOT OF money, they cannot RESTORE THEIR health.
Furthermore, GREED FOR money is often A REASON of divorces, wars, crimes AND OTHER MISFORTUNES OR CALAMITIES.
In conclusion, I think that money DOES NOT BRING us happiness. IT IS JUST like drugs (bez THE) - MAKES us ADICTED TO IT and LEADS us to DECLINE OF MORAL STANDARDS. IT IS needed to LEAD A DECENT LIFE,but IT IS not THE most important THING IN IT.
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