tekst w czasie przeszłym-bardzo pilne!!

Witam... Napisałam opowiadanie o moich ostatnich urodzinach. Mam wielki problem z czasami przeszłymi...prosze o sprawdzenie...bardzo mi to potrzebne na zaliczenie :/ dlatego tak bardzo pilne. Starałam się bardzo. mam nadzieje ze jakos to wyszło...


I was celebrating my last birthday with my best friends. In the morning I thinked that this day were such every different, because I planned anything this day. When I got up about 6, I was rest how never. I went to the bathroom to washed myself, cleaned my teeth and washed my hair. Then I put on my clothes. I choosed various clothes from my wardrobe. Every day I had the same problem, because I don't know what I should wear. But this day I choosed clothes quickly. Then I went to my room to made the bed. Quickly I went to the kitchen. I ate breakfast and I took my sandwiches to the school bag. About 7,30 I went to school. This day I had very much lessons, but for me they lasted unusually quickly. After school at about three o'clock I came back home. I was very happy, that lessons passed so quickly. I came back home slowly because I hadn't plans onto this evening. But when I approached to house I felt anxiety. When I stood under doors from flat I heard odd sounds. I knew that this day weren't anybody in house. I opened slowly doors, and I saw my friends, which prepared birthday party for me. I was very happy that they didn't forget about my birthdays. That was great surprise for me. My room looked incredibly, all was decorated. When all was finished my friends wished me good health and happiness. They gave me splendid presents. We ate cake which they prepared especially for me. Then I tasted other amazing dishes which they prepared. After then we went to the merry towns. We played on everybody roundabouts. The atmosphere was marvelous. Then we came back home. We was very tired after play in merry towns, but we played in my room to late in night. Last guests went out early in the morning. After my birthday party I was very tired but also I was very happy. I don't know that I have so miraculous friends. It was a great night and wonderful surprise. Good food, lots of drink and best friends - that is all what I need to have a great fun.

Jest lepiej, chociaż niestety nie pomaga Ci to, że zamiast napisać kompletnie od nowa zostawiłaś części starej pracy. Wciąż sporo do poprawy, a ponieważ to ma być na zaliczenie nie mogę tak po prostu poprawić tego za Ciebie. Dlatego druga podpowiedź pt. „Jak poprawić swoją pracę”.

Jest tam trochę dość prostych błędów, których wytropienie nie powinno być trudne, kiedy będziesz wiedziała czego szukać. Ale najpierw musisz wiedzieć że błąd popełniłaś. Usiądź na spokojnie nad tą pracą z ołówkiem albo mazakiem i zacznij powoli czytać zaznaczając rzeczy których nie jesteś pewna. Kiedy już ustalisz że musisz coś sprawdzić – zrób to. Mnóstwo informacji znajdziesz w swoim podręczniku/na tej stronie/w Internecie.

Powodzenia.

Niestety nie potrafię znaleźć tutaj więcej błędów...i nic poprawić tez nie umiem. żadna książka ani strona tez nic mi nie da...nauczycielka nie uczy mnie niczego procz pisania prac bez podstaw...pisze prace na zaliczenie i oceny potrzebne sa mi do uzyskania stypendium...niestety angielski nie pozwala mi na to :( i chyba dalej nie pozwoli ;(

Stypendium naukowego, prawda? Bo nie socjalnego przecież...

Gdybyś przyszła z takim problemem wystarczająco wcześnie PRZED zaliczeniem (zwłaszcza jeżeli uważasz, że nauczycielka niczego nie uczy,a ty masz problemy z angielskim), mogłabym z czystym sumieniem pomagać i wyjaśniać. Problem w tym, że swoje problemy rozwiązujesz na tekście na zaliczenie. Mnie z tym niewygodnie. No chyba, że praca będzie podpisana "Edited by: moje imię oraz nazwisko", ale w to jakoś wątpię.

Po zaliczeniu mogę pomagać konkretnie i precyzyjnie, kiedy mam czas. Na zaliczenie - niestety nie.

prace do sprawdzenia dawałam już tutaj wcześniej od kiedy tylko zaczęły się takie zajęcia...
wiec co tydzień mam takie zaliczenia a nie pisała bym tutaj gdyby działało pogotowie językowe w szkole ale niestety tamta Pani zachorowała...
Cały ostatni rok się męczyłam z Angielskim, zeby cokolwiek zrozumieć bo ja miałam mieć poczatkujący - niestety było zaawansowane bo nikt nie będzie się cofał do mojego stanu a na żadne zajęcia płatne mnie nie stać...i tak sama walcze z tym wszystkim ale nie każdy potrafi zrozumieć to, ze pogotowie językowe dało mi dużo w nauce... a teraz odcieli wszystko i nie potrafie sobie sama poradzić chociaz siedze w ksiazkach i mnie to juz wykańcza.

I was celebrating my last birthday with my best friends. In the morning I THOUGHT that THE day was going to be usual like others, because I didn't plan anything special.. When I got up about 6, I was EMENESELY REFRESHED. I went to the bathroom to WASH myself, CLEAN my teeth and WASH my hair. Then THE TIME TO DRESS MYSELF CAME SO I CHOSE various clothes from my wardrobe. Every day I have the same problem, because I don't know what I should wear. But THAT day I CHOSE clothes quickly. Then I went to my room to MAKE the bed AND AFTER DOING THAT I went to the kitchen. I ate breakfast and PUT my sandwiches INTO the school bag. About 7,30 I went to school. THAT day I had A LOT OF lessons, but for me they lasted unusually SHORT. After school ,at about three o'clock I came back home. I was very happy that lessons passed so quickly. I came back home slowly because , AS I SAID, I DIDN'T HAVE plans FOR THAT evening. But when I approached MY house I felt ANXIOUS. When I WAS STANDING AT THE DOOR OF MY flat I heard SOME odd sounds. I knew that THERE WASN'T anybody in THE house. I opened THE DOOR slowly and SUDDENLY I saw my friends WHO SHOUTED „SURPRISE” AND BURST OUT LAUGHING. IT TURNED OUT THAT THEY HAD prepared A SURPRISE party for me. I was very happy that they didn't forget about my birthday. That was REALLY SURPRISING TO me. My room looked incredibly, all WALLS WERE BEAUTIFULLY decorated. When I BLEW OUT THE CANDLES my friends wished me good health and happiness. They gave me splendid presents AND wee ate A cake which they prepared especially for me. AFTER THAT I INVITED ALL MY GUESTS TO THE LOCAL PUB. WE WERE DANCING AND HAVING FUN FOR ABOUT FOUR HOURS. The atmosphere was marvelous. Then we came back home. We WERE very tired , but we STAYED in my room late AT night. WE WERE JOKING, TALKING AND DANCING TO OUR FAVOURITE MUSIC. Last guests went out early in the morning. After my birthday party I was very tired but also very happy. I DIDN”T REALISE that I have so MANY miraculous friends. It was a great night and wonderful surprise. Good food, lots of drink and best friends - that is all what I need to have a great fun.

Dzieki wielkie za pomoc i wyrozumiałość :)

mam nadzieję, że jest tutaj więcej pomocnych ludzi na przyszłość