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Have you ever dreamt about being a famous person, have not you? Certainly plenty of people discreetly imagine it. However it is always like a dream? Without a doubt as an each job either being a celebrities have many drawbacks and benefits.
Probably, the greatest advantage of being a well known one is that they receive a high salary, every pop star or an actor belong to a class of really rich and influential people. Every their even weidrest fantasy can be fulfilled. Furthermore, celebrities frequently attend in a solemn ceremonies and they can be dressed by the most superb fashion designer.
In addition to this fame men life's is by entire time full of attractions, they have never bored; well known people have many opportunities to meet other VIP's everyday and frequently they take part in the expensive trips. Thanks to be famous it is more easy to find a good job. Moreover, it is often believed that famed are have huge acclaim in a society and notoriously meet their supporters whose are interested in star's life.
However, there are obviously the disadvantages which disturb people to be happy at heart.
Firstly, celebrities haven't any private life, each their measure is registered by a inquisitive journalists. It is happen that reporters published untrue informations about stars, which paint them black.
Secondly, famous people can be exposed to jealousy from poorer one, whose can go as far as doing somne kind of crime, thus celebrities are subject to many dangers. Additionally, VIPs because of their workload have few time for a holiday or a lesuire time. They are always on the go. Either fan's attendance may be tiring or annoying and to pose next drawback the same.
To sum up, being a famous is undeniably dream a lot of men but one should realise that proffesions like a singer or an actor aren't bed of roses indeed and have both advantages and disadvantages.

Have you ever dreamt about being a famous person, 'have not you' (co to jest? jak to ma byc pytanie, to Have you not?-ale wg mnie jest niepotr, bo pytanie konczy sie w pierwszym zdaniu ...person?)
Certainly plenty of people 'discreetly' (cay masz na mysli secretely?)imagine it. However 'it is' (nie, pytanie to IS IT) always like a dream? Without a doubt 'as an' JUST LIKE each job 'either' (niepotr) being a 'celebrities' (tutaj l. poj - bo niestety nie mozesz byc wiecej jak jedna osobowoscia) 'have' HAS many drawbacks and benefits.
Probably, the greatest advantage of being 'a well known one' (a well-known what? to jest zle, tutaj trzeba 'well-known) is that 'they' YOU receive a high salary, every pop star or an actor belongS to a class of really rich and influential people. Every ONE OF their 'even' (niepotr) weidrest fantasIES can be fulfilled. Furthermore, celebrities frequently attend 'in a' (niepotr) 'solemn' (zle slowo-tutaj mi przypomina pogrzeby i takie uroczystosci, ale chyba nie to masz na mysli) ceremonies and they can be dressed by the most superb fashion designerS.
In addition to this 'fame men life's' (tego nie moge zrozumiec) is 'by' THROUGHOUT THE entire time full of attractions, they 'have never bored' (have never bored ale co? tu mi przypomina wiercenie sroby); well known people have many opportunities to meet other VIP's everyday and frequently they take
part in 'the' (niepotr) expensive trips. 'Thanks' (DUE TO THE FACT 'to be' OF BEING famous it is more easy to find a good job. Moreover, it is often believed that 'famed' FAMOUS 'are' (po co to?) have huge acclaim in 'a' (niepotr) society and notoriously meet their supporters 'whose' WHO are interested in THE star's life.
However, there are obviously 'the' (po co to?) disadvantages which disturb people 'to be happy at heart' (nie rozumiem tego).
Firstly, celebrities 'haven't' (nie, nie tak, DO NOT HAVE any private life, 'each their measure' (co to jest?) is registered by 'a' (niepotr przed l. mn) inquisitive journalists. It 'is' (niepotr) happenS that reporters
publisH untrue 'informations' (po pierwsze, information to niepo, ale tutaj daj STORIES) about THE stars, which 'paint them black' (nie, nie tak, ...which paints them not in a very good light)
Secondly, famous people can be exposed to jealousy from 'poorer one' (co to ma byc? lepiej THE POOR), 'whose' (dlaczego myslisz 'whose' a 'who') can go as far as doing 'somne' (ortog) kind of crime, thus celebrities are subject to many dangers. Additionally, VIPs because of their workload have 'few' LITTLE time for a holiday or 'a' (niepotr) 'lesuire' (ortog) time.
'Either fan's attendance may be tiring or annoying and to pose next
drawback the same.' (co to ma byc?- nie rozumiem tego)
>To sum up, being 'a famous' (a famous ale what?) is undeniably THE dream OF a lot of men but one should realise that 'proffesions' (ortog) like BEING a singer or an actor 'aren't' (nie pisz tego dziwactwa, daj w calosci ARE NOT)A bed of roses 'indeed' (po co to?) and have both advantages and disadvantages.

Z tego dalabym ci 8/20

Rzeczywiście. Mnóstwo błedów, ale widać, że się starałeś i nie to co inni... Poza tym nawet długa jest ta rozprawka. Chociaż nie jestem nauczycielem, wstawiłbym za tę rozprawkę 10/20.