Dear Sir/Madame,
Zacznij np. tak.
>In response to your job offer advertised in yesterday's newspaper regarding the vacancy in your (nazwa), I would like to apply for the post of a journalist.
albo tak
I am writing to apply for the position of a journalist at your (nazwa firmy), as advertised in last week's Guardian/Daily Mail newspaper on 20th May (albo inna data) :)
Potem wypadałoby napisać o tym gdzie studiowałeś, jakie nagrody otrzymałeś (krótko).
Następnie napisać gdzie pracowałeś.
Np.: I was employed as a journalist by (nazwa firmy) from (data) to (data).
tu napisać co należało do Twoich obowiązków.
Np.: During that time I was responsible for/ my duties included.
Dalej opisać co to były za bonusy (którko).
Np.: I have received many bonuses from my boss such as ... and I also received a similar training as a journalist working for (nazwa firmy).
Wspomnieć gdzie teraz pracujesz, czy pracujesz, czy też nie i dlaczego szukasz takiej pracy. Trochę umotywować.
Np.: My professional experience include /I am also responsible for ... and I am generally noted for my good organisational and ... skills.
Teraz dopiero napisać dlaczego myślisz, że się nadajesz.
Zacznij np.: I believe I would be an ideal candidate for the position you have outlined, as I have had extensive journalistic training with a well-known English/ Polish and revered company/firm. My time spent in (nazwa) also ensured that I obtained a valuable insight into a professional environment of journalists and enabled me to work out good practices. I also have a very good number of contacts in (nazwa miasta np), as well as a good understanding of the English language which necessary if one is to be able work effectively. (choć musisz jeszcze dużo popracować nad swoim angielskim)
No i kończąc ...
Please find enclosed my CV and references from (nazwa firmy), and I would be happy to supply you with further details should they be required. I thank you for considering my application and am willing to attend an interview at any time.
Yours faithfully,
imię i nazwisko
Tak to powinno wyglądać, napisz jeszcze raz i poprawniej. W podanej kolejności. Nie dziw się, że nikt nie sprawdza, bo zrobiłeś to na odwal sie.