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Young people are prone to influences both positive and negative. They try to copy some kind of behaviour, lifestyle and fashion of their idols. If a star is quite normal in these aspects there is no reason to be worry. The problems starts when young people like controversial actors, politics, Tv presenters or singers. In my point of view destructed influence on teens have many personalities which we can watch in television every day , to describe I choose rapper Peja.
Performer use vulgarism as coma during conversation and claim that it’s everything all right . In lyrics rapper often offended pop stars and other well known persons. Moreover in his psyche teens can select community on group which deserve on respect and other one which they can insult impunity. In addition his lifestyle is completely unhealthy because of drugs, hectolitres of alcohol and smoking joints. No doubt polish rap icon is also irresponsible to the bounds of possibility. At his last concert he ordered his fans to “made order” with fifteen-year-old boy who showed him middle finger. Mod rough as sea hit a boy as long as he lose consciousness...
Boys and girls need authorities, a person who point(wskarze) them good values Peja isn’t good model to imitation . He is rude, completely unreliable and immature. What’s more his songs include texts plenty of aggression. In my opinion he has harmful influence on teens.

They try to copy some kindS of behaviour, lifestyle and fashion of
their idols. If a star is quite normal in these aspects there is no
reason to be 'worry' (zla czesc zdania). The 'problems starts' (nie, albo 'problem starts' albo 'problems start' - nie mieszaj) when young people like controversial actors, 'politics' (nie, bo tego nie mialas na mysli - dobrze, ze jestem jasnowidzem, co chcialas powiedziec to POLITICIANS, Tv presenters or singers.
...In my point of view destructed influence on teens have many personalities 'which' (tutaj wg mnie to WHOM-bo pod tymi sztucznymi personalities znajduja sie ludzie a nie rzeczy) we can watch 'in' (kalka z polskiego, tutaj ON television every day, to describe I choose rapper Peja.
...Twego zdania nie za bardzo lubie, troche pomieszane...zacznij inaczej...In my point of view, the most destructive...
A performer useS vulgarism 'as coma' (nie rozumiem tego pojecia tutaj), during conversation and claim that 'it's everything' (zla kol slow...everything iS all right) all right . In THE lyrics THE rapper often offended pop stars and other well known 'persons' (tutaj tez mozna personalities). Moreover in 'his psyche' (teraz dokladnie nie wiem o kim piszesz, bo myslalam, ze to zdanie w jakis sposob laczy sie z poprzednim) teens can select community 'on'(niepotr) groupS which deserve 'on' (niepotr) respect and otherS 'one' (niepotr) which they can 'insult impunity' (nie, cos tu nie tak). In addition his lifestyle is completely unhealthy because of drugs, hectolitres of alcohol and smoking 'joints' (niestety to jest kolokw-prosze o normalne slowo).
No doubt Polish rap icon is also irresponsible to the bounds of
possibility. At his last concert he ordered his fans to “made
order"(nie rozumiem tego pojecia 'make order') with 'fifteen' (jest oprzyjete, ze powyzej 12, piszemy cyframi - 15)-year-old boy who showed him HIS middle finger. 'Mod rough as sea hit a boy as long as he lose consciousness' (tego zdania to nie rozumiem)...
Boys and girls need authorities, a person who pointS them TOWARDS good values Peja isn't A good model to 'imitation' (zla czesc zdania, tutaj IMITATE . What's more his songs include texts WITH plenty of aggression. In my opinion he has A harmful influence on teens.

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Performer uses vulgarism in his comedy bit and claimS...