proszę o sprawdzenie! :))

Jane woke up in the middle of the night. Her room was filled with the moonlight. She was very thirsty, so she decided to go for a glass of water to the kitchen. While she was drinking she heard a veered sound coming from outside. Jane was scared because at the night every each noise seem to be louder than it is in real and for more she was home alone because her parents went on holiday. Despite of her frightened she took a risk and gone to check the source of noise. At the same time it started to rain and began to be more strange. Jane’s heart beated faster and faster. She didn’t want to switch on the light because she was scared that if there is a robber he could see her. Finally she decided to escape home. Everywhere was really dark despite a weak light on her drive. Jane decided to creep there. Suddenly, she heard a familiar voice. There were her parents! She ran to them and tell whole story. At the end it shows that her parents car broke down and they had to turn back home.


Bardzo proszę o sprawdzenie mojej pracy.. Dawno już nie pisałam pracy po angielsku i chyba wyszłam z wprawy.. :) za wszelkie poprawki serdecznie dziękuję!

Her room was filled with 'the' (na tym to trzeba sie zastanowic, ale chyba bez)
moonlight.
While she was drinking she heard a 'veered' (nie za bardzo dobre slowo tutaj) sound coming from outside. Jane was scared because 'at' DURING the night every 'each' (nie mozesz uzywac 'every' a pozniej 'each' tutaj one znacza to samo,) noise seemED to be louder than it 'is' WAS in real and 'for' (nie rozumiem uzycia tego slowa tutaj)more THAN THAT she was home alone because her parents 'went' (zle, tutaj HAD GONE on (przedimek) holiday. Despite 'of her' (niepotr) BEING frightened she took a risk and 'gone' WENT to check the source of (przedimek) noise. At the same time it started to rain and (ale co? musisz napisac, mozna 'situation) began to 'be' APPEAR more strange. Jane's heart
'beated' (nie, tutaj BEAT faster and faster.
Finally she decided to escape FROM home.
'There were' IT WAS her parents! She ran to them and 'tell' (tutaj czas przeszly) (musisz napisac komu) (przedimek) whole story. At the end it 'shows' (zle slowo- poszukaj inne) that her parents car brokeN down and they had to turn back home.

kurczę tyle błędów, aż mi wstyd :D
Dziękuję za pomoc!!