Poprawność językowa tekstu

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Hej. Mam prośbę, czy moglibyście sprawdzić poprawność językową tego utworu? A jeśli coś jest źle (zły czas itp) to prosiłabym o poprawienie. Z góry dziękuję.

Look like perfect couple,
she's so pretty, he will do everything for her.
He's so proud that can be with that girl.
But is she appreciate this?
She is convinced it's obvious thing
that the grate guy loves her.
You deserve something better.
Why you still continue this?

When it's ending
are you gonna be happy?
All you ever want is here.
Are you ready for changing?
Now your life could be like your dream,
but didn't you get scared?
Like every day, every day, you just go away.

I saw this in your eyes first time,
you're smiling like always, but something wrong.
She stay next you, keep your hand,
but I know that the girl hurt you again.
Why you allow on this?
Looking at me searching rescue,
but I'm not sure what I have to do,
I think that you're lost, because

When it's ending
are you gonna be happy?
All you ever want is here.
Are you ready for changing?
Now your life could be like your dream,
but didn't you get scared?
Like every day, every day, you just go away.

Are you ready for this,
it's beginning your new life.
Only you decide,
you're in or out,
but remember...

Now your life could be like your dream,
but didn't you get scared?
Like every day, every day, you just go away.
(they) Look like (the) perfect couple,
she's so pretty, he will do everything for her.
He's so proud that (he) can be with 'that' (this) girl.
But 'is' (does) she appreciate this?
She is convinced it's obvious thing
that the 'grate' GREAT guy loves her.
You deserve something better.
Why DO you still continue this?

When it's ending
are you gonna be happy?
All you ever want is here.
Are you ready for 'changing' (a change)?
Now your life could be like your dream,
but 'didn't' (haven't) you 'get' (got) scared?
Like every day, every day, you just go away.

I saw this in your eyes (the) first time,
you're smiling like always, but something (is) wrong.
She stayS next (to) you, 'keep' (holds) your hand,
but I know that the girl (will) hurt you again.
Why DO you allow 'on' (niepotr) this?
Looking at me searching (for a) rescue,
but I'm not sure what I have to do,
I think that you're lost, because

When it's ending
are you gonna be happy?
All you ever want is here.
Are you ready for 'changing' (a change)?
Now your life could be like your dream,
but 'didn't' (haven't) you 'get' (got) scared?
Like every day, every day, you just go away.

Are you ready for this,
it's (the) beginning (of) your new life.
Only you (can) decide,
(if) you're in or out,
but remember...
now your life could be like your dream,
but 'didn't' (are) you 'get' (not) scared?
Like every day, every day, you just go away.
Dzięki wielkie za pomoc, teraz faktycznie brzmi lepiej :P

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