the prison for teenagers to juvenile prison
prays to God and asks Him for her brother's release (from prison)
"pleases him" znaczy "sprawia mu przyjemnosc"
lots of alcohol
"lots of" nic do zdania nie wnosi, tylko zajmuje miejsce. Mozesz napisac "her parents are alcoholics".
stays in juvenile prison - is currently serving time in juvenile prison
one day Mania's mother had a big surprise for her daughter
po angielsku nie mozna "zrobic niespodzianki" tylko "miec niespodzianke"
there are many characters, nie lots of.
Characters to rzeczownik policzalny.
"Krzysia pears there"
Krzysia what? appears?
Krzysia makes a frequent appearance; Krzysia appears frequently.
goest to sports school, nie sport school
takes piano lessons, nie a piano lessons
Pewnego dnia to u ciebie "one day", nie "some day"
jaki "heap" za domem? moze "hill"?
>Krzysia's nurse is very tutelary, girl doesn't like this.
tutelary? masz chyba na mysli "protective" albo lepiej "over-protective".
tutelary odnosi sie do dobrych duszkow, bogow, itp.
Krzysia's nurse is over-protective and the girl doesn't like it at all.
Potrzebujesz w tym zdaniu albo "and" albo srednik (;). Przecinek nie wystarczy, bo nie ma tu zdania podrzednego.
>We knew them, when they are seventh, and they were starting
>their learning in the first class of school.
Po co te przecinki?
We first meet them when they are seven years old and starting their first grade.