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The most important things in life are invisible. All people have their own private code according to which they decide which things are important and which are not. For many people the most major thing in life is having a lot of money. Nevertheless, it is necessary to ask oneself a question by any chance that wealth is only great joy?

What is true that people who are very reach have a completely different way of looking at life from those who are not. Firstly they don`t have to worry about their financial future, they live calmly being able to satisfy their own needs. Furthermore they can help needy people, by giving money to charitis, So they can draw the satisfaction and feel fulfilled people. Finally the haves might rejoice other and oneself.

It is also obvious that a lack of money might increase many brain teasers, and it may has negative effects on their lives. The main and most warring effects are when in quest for money people take full of energy and it can ruin their relationship with family and friends. Last of all, it could cover up things which are very important is that the pursuit of a wealth becomes their obsession.

In conclusion, it can be agrued that the wealth can bring luck, if money are used properly. Nevertheless, if money are used unwisely, it can be transformed in interminable govern increasings its-obsesion and to disturb the life approximate people.

"Money may be the husk of many things, but not the kernel. It buys you food, but not appetite; medicine, but not health; acquaintances, but not friends; servants, but not loyalty; days of joy, but not peace or happiness."
Taki fajny aforyzm mi sie przypomniał, myśle że może sie przydać ;)

ekstra napisane :)

do co wstepiku:
Nevertheless, it is necessary to ask oneself a question “is wealth only great joy”?
Nevertheless, it is necessary to ask oneself a question “is wealth (really) nothing but great joy”?
Nevertheless, it is necessary to ask oneself a question if wealth is only great joy’?
Nevertheless, it is necessary to ask oneself a question if wealth is (really) nothing but great joy”?

wersja z but ladnie brzmi ;)

All people have their
>own private code according to which they decide which things are
>important and which are not.

All people have their own private code THAT HELPS THEM TO DECIDE ...


For many people the most major thing in
>life is having a lot of money.

most major thing -> the most important/significant thing
having money (nie mozna tu formy cont.) - possessing money, albo po prostu is money

Nevertheless, it is necessary to ask
>oneself a question by any chance that wealth is only great joy

tu igor cos proponowal, nie bedę się powtarzac


>What is true that people who are very reach have a completely
>different way of looking at life from those who are not

It's true that people ...
reach ??? - rich

napisałabym :
It is true that rich people see life from a completely different perspective comparing to those who are lacking in money and possessions

As a matter of fact, people who are very rich look at life in a completely different way from people who are not economically independent.

Firstly, the rich do not have to worry about their financial future, they live calmly
being able to satisfy their own needs. Furthermore, they help people in need, by giving money to the charity, for instance. This way they can get (feel) satisfaction …

>and feel fulfilled people. Finally the haves might rejoice other and oneself. (nie rozumiem)

potem nie do konca rozumiem co masz na mysli.

Finally the haves might rejoice other
>and oneself. w tymzdaniu chodziło o to że bogaci mogš sprawiać radoœc zarówno sobie jak i innym ale nie potrafie tego ładnie ujšć:)