prosze ...to na jutro :////

hmm prosze juz ostatni raz nie mam pojecia jak to poprawic a musze to oddac jutro..

In life we all have bad and good days. Sometimes we feel like we are fed up with everything. We feel blue. I have such days too.
As everyday I woke up around 7. After having a quick breakfast I went to school. As ussual I went to the bus station with my friend. As we were waiting for a buy a had a huch that this day will be special. The sun was shining and the birds were singing. I thought that day could change everything for the better. In shool I had eight long and exhausting lessons.
In the evening i had been going to party with my friends. According to convention I was ready about 10 p.m I didnt have willinghen por party but i didnt want to sadden them. I imitated that i'm glad.
When we have approached i was very suprised. That i had seen sems to be imposible. That was my favourite music star -Bryan Adams. I coudnt belived to it. I dreamed about this moment from child and now it have granted. due my friends. I would never forget that concert and when i grow up i will bego there one more time.
Now i know that nothing lests eternally and evil is finished but we must to want it.

Pierwsze czesc ogolnie dobra. Pare literowek tam jest: bus nie buy, I had a hunch

In the evening I was going to a party with my friends. (according to convention?? - nielogiczne tutaj. Wlasciwie to cale zdanie tu jest niepotrzebne.) I didn't feel like going, but I didn't want to disappoint my friends. I pretended then that I was excited.
When we arrived, I got a big surprise! It's seems impossible to me now, but it's true. At the party there was my favourite music star - Bryan Adams. I couldn't believe it. I've been dreaming about this moment since childhood and now my dream has come true. All thanks to my friends. I will never forget that concert and when I grow up I will go there once more.

W ostatnim zdaniu kompletnie nie wiem o co Ci chodzi.

mattie83 19 Wrz 2005, 23:30 odpowiedz
poprawki:

3rd line: usual

5th line: I thought that that day

7th line: I was going

according to our plan

8th line: I didn't fancy going to the party

but I didn't want to disappoint them

9th : I pretended I was glad

10th: when we arrived

What I heard seemed impossible

It was..

11th: I couldn't believe it

I had been dreaming about this moment since my childhood

12th and then it became reality, due to ..

13th I'm going to go there

14th ??

ziekuje..nawet nie wiesz jak mi pomogłas :]

Zamien "it's seems impossible to me now, but it's true" (bo i tak jest w tym blad - it's) na to co matti napisal na dole: What I heard was impossible.

jeszcze raz dziekuje :]