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After graduation people often move out from family house and they on their own account. this proceeding open a new chase, adulthood. from the viewpoint of teenager live without parental control is a dream come true. On the one hand adults can do what they want but on The other hand they are responsible for their action. But it doesn’t mean that adulthood id devoid fun. Everyone has heard about students who despite fact that they often are hard up can enjoy their life and find time for study and for fun.

Nie jestem specjalistką, ale juz w pierwszym zdaniu końcówka powinna być raczej:
family house and they live on their own account
ponieważ: living on one's own - życie na własny rachunek

A lot of fresh university graduates decide it is time for them to move out of their parents' house and to try to live on their own. This very step is often considered to be the end of childhood and the begining of life as an adult. From the point of view of a teenager living without parental control is a dream come true. On the one hand adults can do whatever they want to but on the other hand they are responsible for their actions. Of course it doesn't mean that adulthood is completely devoid of fun. Everyone has heard about students who despite having to work very hard can still enjoy their life and can always find time for both study and fun.

A lot of fresh university graduates decide it is time for them to move out of their parents' house and to try to live on their own. This very step is often considered to be the end of childhood and the begining of life as an adult. From the point of view of a teenager living without parental control is a dream come true. On the one hand adults can do whatever they want to but on the other hand they are responsible for their actions. Of course it doesn't mean that adulthood is completely devoid of fun. Everyone has heard about students who despite having to work very hard can still enjoy their life and can always find time for both study and fun.

A lot of fresh university graduates decide it is time for them to move out of their parents' house and to try to live on their own. This [very...nie potrzeb.] step is often considered to be the end of childhood and the begining (orto.) of life as an adult. From the point of view of a teenager living without parental control, brakuje tu slowo) is a dream come true. On the one hand, adults can do whatever they want to, but on the other hand, they are responsible for their actions. Of course, it doesn't mean that adulthood is completely devoid of fun. Everyone has heard about students who, despite having to work very hard, can still enjoy their life and can always find time for both study and fun.

From the point of view of a teenager living without parental control, brakuje tu slowo) is a dream come true.


jakiego słowa brakuje?

it, this, the Internet, going on holiday alone itp.