A Nice Summery Surprise - Can You check it ;-) ?

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A Nice Summery Surprise

I remember it as today. It was summer and I was eleven years old. I was boring deadly… All my friends went away somewhere: over sea, in mountains or to grandparents, but I must stayed at home. On addition, I didn’t have sister or brother and both my mother and father were working in spite of holidays.

When we had to going to Hungary as turned out that my mum was ill. She felt bad and queer from several days, but then she felt splendidly. It was strange and we didn’t know what happened, so she had to went to a doctor – there was no question about it.

When my mother returned I saw a huge smile on her face. Immediately I realized that it couldn’t be a bad news. My mum was pregnant. “You will be have a little brother, soon” – she said. I couldn’t believe… “I will be have a brother?” - I repeated with astonishment. Next, I was hugging her firmly.

I was dreaming about siblings and my dream came true. I was very happy. My mother given birth in December. I have obtained brother on Christmas :). It was the best present! Today, I’m eighteen years old and I have seven-years old brother. Indescribable!
A Nice Summery Surprise
-A Nice Summer Surprise
I remember it as today. It was summer and I was eleven years old.
-I remember it as if it was today.................................
I was boring deadly...
-I was deadly bored.
All my friends went away somewhere: over sea, in mountains or to grandparents,
-................. somewhere: to the seaside, to the mountains.....
but I must stayed at home.
- but I had to stay at home.
On addition, I didn't have sister or brother and both my mother and father were working in spite of holidays.
-In addition,I didn't have a sister or a brother.............
When we had to going to Hungary as turned out that my mum was ill.
-When we were to go to Hungary it turned out ........
She felt bad and queer from several days, but then she felt splendidly.
-.....................for several days but then she got better.
It was strange and we didn't know what happened, so she had to went
-.................. so she had to go
to a doctor - there was no question about it.

When my mother returned I saw a huge smile on her face. Immediately I realized that it couldn't be a bad news. My mum was pregnant.
“You will be have a little brother, soon" - she said.
-"You will have.....
I couldn't believe... “I will be have a brother?" - I repeated with astonishment.
-.......................... I will have a brother.........
Next, I was hugging her firmly.
- Next I hugged her firmly.
I was dreaming about siblings and my dream came true. I was very happy. My mother given birth in December.
-.................gave birth ......
I have obtained brother on Christmas :).
-(obtain - to bardzo formalnie) I have got (albo: I was given) a brother for Christmas
- It was the best present! Today, I'm eighteen years old and I have seven-years (seven-YEAR-old - bez S) old brother. Indescribable(INCREDIBLE - to trochę co innego , ale jakoś bardziej mi pasuje)

Bardzo miłe opowiadanko! Uważaj na czasowniki modalne - po nich zawsze jest forma podstawowa:
She had to GO.
Bodzio, Dzięki bardzo... Złoty chłopak :)
Aj, oczywiście mało być: Dzięki Bobcio - przepraszam (:

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