Essay "Living on campus is the best option for students" - czy ktoś mógłby sprawdzić?

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In my opinion, living on campus is the best option for students. Of course it has a few defects, but definitely there is more advantages.
Firstly, students don't have to waste time and money travelling to university. It is easier to reach lessons or library, because everything is within the campus. In fact living on campus is good way to save some money and time. What is more, they didn’t have to live in the small, dirty house, with old women who want a huge amount of money for rent.
Secondly, students have better social life in campus. They meet more people to make friends with and with whom they can hang out and have fun in the nearest student’s clubs. Moreover, they can learn together, which is very helpful to understand all knowledge and makes their learning time more enjoyable. The social life is very important, it helps us to make good relationships with schoolmates.
On the other hand, some people say that it is hard to concentrate on learning when living on campus because there is often a party next door. Furthermore, your space is limited because rooms are small so you can only take bare essentials. Moreover, you need to share bedroom and bathroom with other residents what causes lack of privacy.
All in all, I believe that living in campus is a good chose for students. Student’s social live becomes more attractive. In addition, it is good to have everything nearby, it makes life easier.
Ocena: 3/5

Tekst jest zrozumiały, ale jest wiele błędów. Nie chce mi się ich wszystkich wymieniać.
Of course it has a few defects, but definitely there 'is' (to ma się zgadzać z 'advantages, które jest l. mnoga) more advantages.
Firstly, students don't have to waste time and money travelling to (przedimek) university. It is easier to reach lessons or (przedimek) library, because everything is within the campus. In fact living on campus is (przedimek) good way to save some money and time. What is more, they 'didn’t' (zly czas) have to live in 'the' (zly przedimek) small, dirty house, with old women who want a huge amount of money for rent.
Secondly, students have (przedimek) better social life 'in' (daj ON) campus. They meet more people to make friends with and with whom they can hang out and have fun in the nearest 'student’s' (tutaj inaczej...students' ) clubs. Moreover, they can learn together, which is very helpful 'to understand' (dałabym ..in understanding) all knowledge and makes their learning time more enjoyable. The social life is very important, it helps 'us' (dlaczego najpierw o 'tchem a później o 'us?) to make good relationships with schoolmates.
Moreover, you need to share bedroom and bathroom with other residents 'what' (zle slowo, kalka z polskiego 'co') causes lack of privacy.
All in all, I believe that living 'in' ON campus is a good 'chose' (zla forma mowy) for students. Student’s social 'live' (tutaj potrzeba rzeczownika) becomes more attractive.

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