prosze czy moze ktos mi sprawdzić błędy??prosze

Everyone like do something special, or something creative, and some people like for example working in very dangerous trade. The first dangerous job is pilot of glider. This job demand a very good concentration, and good sanity. Because, if you will be not good concentration, on the wing, you can lose control immediately a glider. In consequence you can depend upon it, you will die.
Next very dangerous job is captain of the fishing vessel, because you don’t know where are the rocks beetle on sea. And in consequence you can collides with rocks, and the ship can sink. If you want work like captain of the fishing vessel, you must be very mature, and attentive, and hard-working because this job demand this characteristic personality But the policemen is another very dangerous job, because they must catch the offenders, but sometimes offenders are a very unsafe, and the policemen can lose his health or life. And if you would be a policemen you must be very careful. And you mast pass the special exam. Another job which is very risky is a building worker, because they must work on height, and this job for fresh workers is the most dangerous because they can fall with height, and die. So if you would work like building worker you must be careful, and undistracted. And the last know me dangerous job is trainer of very ugly animals, for example the tigers trainer. If you have a very feeble mentally you shouldn’t work with the tigers, because this animal can eat you instead of meal. For this job you must be Patient, mature, decisive because you can’t do nothing wrong, because this animals are very sensitive, and can be very aggressive if you do something wrong.

- powinno byc like doing albo like to do something
-"This job demand a..." powinno byc demands

nie moze byc "unsafe" lepiej "dangerous"

>Everyone like do something special, or something creative...
*like doing
>dangerous job is pilot of glider...
*mysle ze zamiast 'job' lepiej bedzie brzmialo slowo 'profession' czyli zawód
>This job demand a very good
* demandS--->to nie tylko w tym zdaniu
>and good sanity
*a good sanity
>Because, if you will be not good concentration, on the wing, you can lose control immediately a glider.
*zdanie bez sensu
>In consequence you can depend upon it, you will die.
*nastepne zdanie bez sensu
kurcze nie chce mi sie dalej tego sprawdzac bo za duzo bledow i najchetniej bym to cale poprawila;/ ale jeszcze jeden blad ktory sie rzuca w oczy to:
>And if you would be a policemen you must be very careful.
*if you are a policeman....
>feeble mentally hmm skad ty to wytrzasnelas
nie nie mam juz sily moze ktos inny Ci dalej pomoze
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