Covering letter- pomoc o sprawdzenie

Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing to apply for the position of an intern advertised on the website pracuj.pl.
As outlined in the enclosed resume, I have just graduated from Jagiellonian University in Cracow with a degree in Financial Mathematics and now I am seeking opportunities for further personal development and to fulfil my career aspiration, which I convince it’s possible in your company.
The important features of my personality are analytical thinking and conscientious, which are inherent attributes of mathematician. In addition, I am a dependable, observant and open-minded person striving for extending knowledge.
I have good communication and interpersonal skills. What’s more, I can work efficiently both in a individually and a team, about which I could have convinced during my working in the math club in Tarnów.
My advantage is also the fast learning ability how to operate the computer programs and using in these programs programming languages.
I would be happy to supply you with further details. I am willing to attend an interview at any time of your convenience.


Yours faithfully,

'As outlined in the enclosed resume' (to nie jest potrzebne, a do tego przeciez to mozna tam przeczytac)
I have just graduated from THE Jagiellonian University in Cracow with a degree in Financial Mathematics and now I am seeking opportunities for further personal development and to fulfil my career aspiration, which I (tu cos bark) 'convince' (zly czas) 'it’s' (co to jest? napisz w calosci) possible in your company.
The important features of my personality are analytical thinking and 'conscientious' (zle slowo), which are inherent attributes of (brak przedimka) mathematician. In addition, I am a dependable, observant and open-minded person striving 'for extending' (nie, nie tak, tutaj...striving to extend my) knowledge.
'What’s' (napisz to w calosci, w powaznych listach nie skracamy slow) more, I can work efficiently both 'in a' (tego nie rozumiem) individually and (tu brakuje slowa, pomiedzy) a team, about which 'I could have convinced' (ale kogo? musisz napisac, coz nie za bardzo zgrabne zdanie) during my working in the math club in Tarnów.
My advantage (ale czego? do czego?) is also 'the' (niepotr) fast learning ability 'how to' (niepotr, wystarczy IN operatING 'the' (niepotr) computer programs and using 'in these programs programming languages' (arse over tit, tutaj using program. langs in these...).
I would be happy to supply you with further details (ale do czego?) .
I am willing to attend an interview at any time 'of' (nie, tutaj AT) your convenience.

Dziękuje za sprawdzenie terri, poprawiłem jeszcze raz i pozmieniałem trochę i mam prośbę o ponowne sprawdzenie, czy dalej istnieją błędy , dziękuję z góry za pomoc ponowną

I am writing to apply for the position of an intern advertised on the website pracuj.pl.
I have just graduated from the Jagiellonian University in Cracow with a degree in Financial Mathematics and now I am seeking opportunities for further personal development and to fulfil my career aspirations, which I am convinced it is possible in your company.
The important features of my personality is analytical thinking and particularity, which are inherent attributes of a mathematician. In addition, I am a dependable, observant and open-minded person striving to extend knowledge.
I have good communication and interpersonal skills. During my activity in the math club in Tarnów, I learned cooperate, solve problems and work in teams. My strength is also fast learning ability in operating computer programs and using programming languages in these, which I enjoy it.
I hope I have convinced you that my up-to-the-minute qualifications and enthusiasm to learn would make me an asset. I am confident that I possess the attributes you’re looking for and am available for an immediate start. Please don’t hesitate to get in touch if you’d like to discuss my application further.

The important features of my personality 'is' (nie, bo 'featues' to l. mnoiga, to czasownik tez musi byc w l. mn - 'are') analytical thinking and particularity, which are inherent attributes of a mathematician. In addition, I am a dependable, observant and open-minded person striving to extend MY knowledge.
During my activity in the math club in Tarnów, I learned HOW TO cooperate, solve problems and work in teams. My strength is also 'fast' (nie, tutaj A QUICK) learning ability in operating computer programs and using programming languages 'in these' (wg mnie niepotr), which I enjoy 'it' (no, co to 'it' tutaj robi? Niepotrzeba tego w zdaniu).
I hope I have convinced you that my up-to-the-minute qualifications and enthusiasm to learn would make me an asset IN YOUR COMPANY. I am confident that I possess the attributes you’re looking for and am available 'for an immediate start' (nie, nie tak,...to start immediately).
Nowy akapit...Please don’t hesitate to get in touch if you’d like to discuss my application further.

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