It was a cold dark 'evenig' (ortog).
She was in 'hurry up' (zle) but she wasn't going home.
She was driving to her 'friend' (nie dokonczylas slowa) house to have dinner.
Anna lived 'on' (zle) the village together with her 'parent's' (zle) and (brak przedimka) older brother Jack.
Vanessa was tired after (przedimek) hard work day and she was 'carefully' (zla czesc mowy) behind the wheel.
'Unfortunatelly' (ortog) (tutaj daj przecinek) she was very sleepy so she decided (brak slowa) 'made' (zly czas) short stop to breathe (brak slowa) fresh air.
'She was herself in this place.' (calkowicie nie rozumiem tego zdania) She looked (tu brak najmniej 2 slowa) that some dark car stopped near. 'The' (zle slowo) tall man got out of (przedimek) car and he 'went' (nie, on nie 'poszedl' ale 'przyszedl') - jest roznica) to Vanessa.
She jumped 'for' (zle) her car and she left. She didn't know what she 'must' (zly modal) do.
Vanessa drove very 'fast' (zla czesc mowy). She 'had hope' (uzyj jedno slowo) that the man (tu brakuje 2 slowa) lost.
When she 'get' (zle) to 'the' (niepotr) 'Anna' (dokoncz slowo) house, the dark car 'didn't was' (zle) 'here' (zle). Vanessa calmy got out of (przedimek) car and she went to (przedimek) door. Suddenly behind (przedimek) house arrived 'following car' (nastepny samochod? nie, to jest zle, napisz to poprawnie).
The 'door were' (dlaczego jedno jest w l. poj a drugie w l. mnogiej?) closed.
He had (przedimek) gun and he 'gone' (zle slowo) to 'the' (niepotr) Vanessa. All time Vanessa 'had hope' (daj jedno slowo) that is (tu cos brak) only (przedimek) bad dream.
Suddenly the door (ale czego? domu? samochodu? napisz to jasniej) opened. Out of (przedimek) house 'run' (zly czas) Anna together with her parents.
It turned out that the man who drove (przedimek) dark car 'is' (zly czas) 'brother Anna' (po jakiemu to, napisz An....brother), Jack.
It was only (przedimek) 'halloween' (duza litera - nazwa wlasna) joke.
Zrob cos z tymi przedimkami (a, an, the). Nie za bardzo rozumiesz kiedy i jak je uzywac.