zapytanie o praktyki

Witam,
zamierzam starać się o praktyki za granicą i będę ogromnie wdzięczna za znalezienie ewentualnych błędów.
Dziękuję!



Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to enquire about an internship in your company.

I’ve graduated Gdynia Maritime University in Poland where I obtained engenier degree diploma in Quality Control and Management of Commodity Science. I am also certificated Quality Management System Managger and Environmental Management System Assistant. I’m finishing my master degree of Nutrition Services and Dietetic now.
I would like to inquire about undertaking technical practice in your company to improve practical skills which are needed for future work in this profession.
I am sending you my CV in enclosure.

Hope to hear from you soon.

Yours faithfully,
A.A.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to enquire about mozliwości an internship in your company.

I’ve graduated brak Gdynia Maritime University in Poland where I obtained a Bachelor of Engineering diploma in Quality Control and Management of Commodity Science nie rozumiem: zarządzanie nauką?. I am also przedimek certified Quality Management System Managger<-ortogr and Environmental Management System Assistant. Currently, I am completing my Master's degree of<-inny przyimek Nutrition Services and Dietetic<-dietetyczny now.
I would like to inquire about undertaking

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