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Czy mógłby mi ktoś sprawdzić i ewentualnie wytknąć błędy ? Z góry dziękuję.

Recently I watched „Jumanji”. This’s fantasy film which talking about two young children whos found old game which name’s „Jumanji”. Two characters play this game but it’s magic ability draw one of main character to inside. Scene which I remembered this when Alan and Sarah are married and expecting for their first child. Alan has taken over the shoe business. Judy, Peter and their parents meet with Alan and Sarah at a Christmas party, where Alan and Sarah offer the children’s father a job in the shoe company and discourage them from going on the ski trip that would have killed them. The next scene two young girls hear drumbeats as they walk along a beach, and they see the Jumanji board half-buried in the sand. I really like this scene because it shows a different story of the film, he turns the fate of the characters.

This’s ___ fantasy film which talking about two young children whos found ___ old BOARD game which name’s „Jumanji”. ___Two characters play this game but it’s magic ability draw one of main character to ___ inside. ___ Scene which I remembered this when Alan and Sarah are married and expecting for their first child.

Pomogło by gdybyś naprowadziła że Alan i Sarah to również dzieci na początku twojego opisu

Co mają oznaczać "___" ? Na początku jest napisane, że to dzieci.

Co mają oznaczać "___" ? brak słowa, głównie przedimka;)

Na początku jest napisane, że to dzieci. no dobrze, ale czytający nie ma pojęcia że to jest również Alan i Sarah (dużo wcześniej;). Zresztą, pisz jak chcesz. To tylko była taka uwaga ode mnie;)

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Źle napisane (błędy;)
*mała poprawka:
expecting for their first child.