Sprawdzenie rozprawki

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Napisz rozprawkę, w której przedstawisz wady i zalety uczenia się kilku języków obcych jednocześnie.
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The foreign languages were became more popular in the world. A lot of people decided to learn several languages at the same time. However learning many languages at the same time is good? I am presenting a little advantages and disadvantages in this topic.
The advantage is that knowing many languages we are better received by other people. We are more ambitious and intelligent. I think many languages are similar and a lot of words mean the same thing. Even though there are also languages where the word is pronounced the same and means something else. For example the word ‘krawat’ in Polish means ‘tie’ but in Russian ‘кровать’ (we pronounce the same way as in Polish) means ‘bed’. We read the ending of words in some languages, but in others not and we can confuse words and make mistakes. I think that the most important disadvantage is time. We won’t free time enough to learn a languages at a good level. I think it is better to learn one languages 30 minutes every day that 15 minutes for two languages.
Pros and cons of learning several foreign languages at the same time depend on human. Whether he want to lear only the basics or he would like to speak fluently. Whether he have a lot of time during the day. Studying languages are alway good idea.

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The foreign languages were became more popular in the world. A lot of people decided DLACZEGO PAST?to learn several languages at the same time. However learning many languages at the same time is good? I am presenting a little advantages and disadvantages in this topic.
The advantage is that BY knowing many languages we are better received by other people. We are more ambitious and intelligent.
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We won’t free time enough to learn a languages at a good level. I think it is better to learn one languages 30 minutes every day that 15 minutes for two languages. NIE ROZUMIEM TEGO
Pros and cons of learning several foreign languages at the same time depend on human. Whether he np YOU want to lear only the basics or he would like to speak fluently. Whether he have a lot of time during the day. Studying languages are alway good idea.

oba zdania powinny być w present perfect (have +czas. 3 forma) . Są to zjawiska które zaczęły się jakiś czas temu i trwają nadal. brak formy pytania. "is learning many languages..."
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Pros and cons of learning several foreign languages at the same time depend on human a person. Whether he they want to lear only the basics or he they would like to speak fluently. Whether he they have a lot of time during the day. Studying languages are alway good idea.