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When we start reading 'abc' by Tom Mctime, the first person
>we meet is Timmy Baker. He is the novel's narrator and one of its most
>important characters at THE SAME TIME. Accompanied by Timmy, we take part in a
>trip to A world of fame, money and power. A world like that is not
>always good.
we meet him as a young man, who after the great war holds to move [co znaczy holds to move? decides to move] to the east and starts to work as a stock broker. he is looking for somewhere to live. a young colleague offers him accommodation in a house not far from the city where they would live together and share the rent. the firm [lepiej: his company] sends him to washington and
>todd relocates there alone. that west allin [dlaczego 'that'? co to ma znaczyc?] is the place where todd and alan meet later.
After freedom and confidence in his movements, he guessed that it was Bla Bla Bla.
Later on we find out how the main charaters met. It was at Timmy's. He sent (had sent) an invitation to Todd. Since that time their lives have been connected.
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