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My name is XXXXX Xxxxxx. I'am writting to enguive about work in music shop.

I'am writting in responce to regard to jour advertismentwhich appeared in newspaper. I learnt englich for 5 year.My english is a high level. I am a very interested this job. i like all types of music. I finished studying in academy of music in warsaw.I fell i'am a copative.I was work in resemble shop. This job is it for me becouse i like music very much. I think i will be perfectly to do this job. Adidional i have my group rock.

Please could you send more information and application form to the above addres.

Za wszystkie uwagi i poprawki bardzo dziękuje;)

{My name is XXXXX Xxxxxx. I'am writting to enguive about work in music shop. - Daruj sobie te zdania. Nie zaczynamy listow formalnych od "My name is...")

I'am writting{pisownia!} in responce{pisownia!} {BEZ:to regard} to jour advertisment{ }which appeared in {newspaper - podaj tytul i date}{tu wstaw: REGARDING work in A music shop}.

I {learnt-HAVE BEEN STUDYING} englich{pis!} for 5 year {l.mn.?}.{polacz te zdania, np. AND} {My english{pis.!} is a high level - zamiast tego dalabym: AND I AM NOW QUITE FLUENT IN THIS LANGUAGE}.

I am a very interested {IN!} this job {. - BECAUSE} i{I} like all types of music.

I finished studying in academy of music in warsaw. - I AM ALSO A GRADUATE OF THE WARSAW ACADEMY OF MUSIC (??}


I fell i'am a copative. {nie rozumiem tego zdania}

I was work in resemble shop. {tego tez nie ;-(}

This job is it for me becouse{pisownia!} i like music very much. {chyba sie powtarzasz. Sprobuj wymyslic inne powody}

I think i{I} will be {perfectly - AN IDEAL CANDIDATE FOR} {BEZ:to do} this job.

Adidional{IN ADDITION,} i have my {OWN} {group rock - ROCK GROUP} - to zdanie chyba gdzies wczesniej, dodaj tez dlaczego to jest wazne, ze masz wlasny zespol - dlaczego bedzie to pomocne w Twojej pracy}.

{Please could you - I WOULD BE GRATEFUL IF YOU WOULD} send more information and {AN} application form to the above addres.

Na poczatku dodaj: Dear Sir or Madam,
Na koncu: Yours faithfully,

Bardzo dziękuje za pomoc;)pozdrawiam