[Sprawdzenie] List oficjalny

Proszę o sprawdzenie listu, pisany dość późno, a można powiedzieć nawet, że wcześnie, więc proszę o wyrozumiałość ;)

Napisz list do znanej firmy elektronicznej, w którym wyrazisz zainteresowanie ofertą związaną z testowaniem wyrobów - nowych elektronicznych gadżetów tej firmy. W liście zawrzyj:
*krótką charakterystykę swojej osoby w aspekcie oferowanego zajęcia testera nowego produktu,
*informację o posiadanych kwalifikacjach oraz doświadczeniach związanych z elektroniką użytkową,
*prośbę o bardziej szczegółowe objaśnienia Twojej przyszłej funkcji testera,
*zapytanie o warunki finansowe przedsięwzięcia oraz czas trwania umowy partnerskiej

Dear Sir or Madam,
I would like to apply for the position of electronics gadget's tester. I am student of second year Electronics on Brown's University and have some experience with technology - as shown in my CV I have already worked for Tracer company, but I have left it becouse nothing new was happen there. I am fan of new technologic solutions and I enjoy working in challenging environment, that is why I want to work for your company.

Full details of my qualification and working experience are included in the attached CV.

I would be very thankful if you could send me some more information about the poisition which I applying for. It would be wonderful too, if I could get full details of payment conditions and contract time too.

I hope you will take my application. I am available for an interview at your advance and look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully XYZ.

Dear Sir or Madam,
I would like to apply for the position of an electronics gadget's tester. I am a student of the second year of Electronics onat Brown's University and have some experience within technology. as shownAs you can see in my CV, I have already worked for Tracer company, but I have left it because nothing new was going to happen there (albo: was happening there). I am a fan of new technologic solutions and I enjoy working in a challenging environment. That is why I want(lepiej: would like) to work for your company.

All details of my qualification and working experience are included in the attached CV.

I would be very thankful if you could send me some more information about the position which I am applying for. I would be pleased to get full details of the payment conditions and contract time too.

I hope you will take my application in consideration. I am available for an interview at your advance (co to ma znaczyc?) and look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully XYZ.

Dzięki wielkie karo za poświęcenie czasu, to at your advance musiało mi się już pomylić z innym listem..