Rozprawka, proszÄ™ o sprawdzenie

Witam, proszÄ™ o sprawdzenie rozprawki
"Coraz więcej rodzin decyduje się na kształcenie dzieci w domu. Napisz rozprawkę przedstawiającą wady i zalety takiego rozwiązania".

Ogólnie mam pojęcie, że ta rozprawka średnio się kupy trzyma, ale niestety lepszej nie napiszę, nie potrafię przekazać wszystkiego co myślę na ten temat :(


Nowadays, more and more families are deciding to educate their children at home. It is hard to consider (chodzi o ocenić – nie wiem jakie słowo najlepiej użyć) is this modern idea favouring kids in their progress.

First of all, education in home is very effective. Children are not distracted by sounds, friends, full of funny incidents and what is the most important – they are not stressed due to classmates, so they need less time to study a certain material and they can do it in their own pace. What is more they can concentrate on one, main subject and a few connected with it. They do not have to learn as much as in school, mainly things these are totally unnecessary for them.

On the other hand, children who are educated at home are not prepared to work in groups, they do not being integrated with theirs contemporaries so later they easily get stressed and cannot cooperate. Furthermore, kids often are not enough determined to learn at home. In school they have to learn under threat of being thrown out for exams’ fail.

In conclusion idea of home educating depends on children’ character. If they are strong determined and do not have problems with team work they should educate at home, if not – they have to learn at school. It is very hard decision for parents too, but they should know possibilities of their children.

Nowadays, more and more families are deciding to educate their children at home. {However,} it is hard to {assess} whether {} this modern {trend favours children} in their progress.

First of all, {home schooling} is very effective. Children are not distracted by sounds, friends, full of funny incidents and, {} most {importantly,} they are not stressed {by their} classmates. {As a result,} they need less time to {comprehend} a {particular} material and they can do it {at} their own pace. What is more, they can concentrate on one, main subject and a few connected with it. They do not have to learn as much as {at} school, {this mainly concerns} things {that} are totally unnecessary for them.

On the other hand, children who are educated at home are not prepared to work in groups - they {often find it difficult to integrate} with theirs contemporaries so {that at a} later {time} they {}get stressed {easily} and cannot cooperate. Furthermore, {children} are {often} not {}determined {enough} to learn at home. {At} school, they have to learn under {threat} of {a possibility of} being {expelled} for {exam failure}.

In conclusion, {the} idea of home {schooling} depends on {a child's} character. If they are {clearly} determined and do not have problems with team work, they {can be schooled} at home, if not – they {should be educated} at school. It is {a} very hard decision for parents too, but they should know {about the} possibilities {for} their children.

Wielkie dzięki za sprawdzenie. Mam takie pytanie co do tego fragmentu:
(...){the} idea of home {schooling} depends on {a child's} character. If they are {clearly} determined(...)

Jeżeli najpierw piszę w liczbie pojedynczej "child" to potem mogę przejść od razu do mnogiej "they"? Bo właśnie sugerując się, że nie mogę napisałem children :P

no patrz, dobrze pojmujesz takie zaleznosci :)

napisz albo tak, jak wczesniej miales:
...depends on children's characters. If they are...
lub tak:
...depends on a child's character. If a child/he or she is...

ok, dzięki wielkie :)