application for a course

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Dear Sir/Madam

I am writing to apply for a Chemistry Enhancement Course at our London Metropolitian University which I saw advertised in 'New Scientist' of 30th January.
I am a student of electrical engineering at AGH University of Science and Technology in Cracow. I am particularly interested in this course because I love to work with children so I want a career teaching Chemistry in secondary school but my experience and qualifications for position of a teacher are insufficient today.
I pasionate about science and I want to know more about Chemistry, Physics and Biology and develop specialist knowledge about that. I want to know a new people and eductonal system. I am patient, friendly, well organised and I have excellent communication skills. I would like to try my abilities and realize it in secondary school. I belive that I am well-suited to a career in teaching and I keen to work in this field.
I think that your university is very good and lecturers have high qualifications so your course would give me an excellent basics for future occupational career. I am available to start the course as soon as possible. I prefer a two-week intensive course, in small groups or on a one-to-one basis. I can be contacted at the above address or on 42[tel]at any time. I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours faithfully,
XYZ


Z góry dziękuje :)

I am writing to apply for a Chemistry Enhancement Course at 'our' (Nasza? -cos nie tak) London Metropolitian University which I saw advertised in 'New Scientist' of 30th January (ale ktorego roku, dodaj).
I am a student of Electrical Engineering (duze litery, to nazwa wlasna) at 'AGH' (napisz w calosci)a University of Science and Technology in Cracow. I am particularly interested in this course because I love to work with children(tu cos brakuje) so I want a career (tu cos brakuje) teaching Chemistry in (cos brakuje) secondary school (cos brakuje) but my experience and qualifications for (cos brakuje) position of a teacher are (napisz 'currently') insufficient 'today' (niepotr. (To zdanie jest za dlugie, ma 3 rozne mysli).
I (tu cos brak) 'pasionate' (ortog) about science and I want to know more about Chemistry, Physics and Biology and (tu cos brak) develop specialist knowledge about 'that' (napisz cod odpowiedniejszego tu). I want to 'know' (daj inne slowo) 'a' (przed l. mn??) new people and (cos brak) 'eductonal' (ortog) system.
I would like to try my abilities and realize 'it' (to ma sie zgadzac z 'abilities' popraw) in secondary school. I 'belive' (ortog) that I am well-suited to a career in teaching and I (cos brak) keen to work in this field.
'I think that your university is very good' (nie rozumiem dlaczego 'stating the obvious') and lecturers have 'high qualifications' (nie, tak sie nie pisze, popraw) so your course would give me an excellent 'basics' (daj 'basis') for (cos brak) future occupational career.
NP.(new paragraph) I am available to start the course as soon as possible.
NP. I can be contacted at the above address or on 42[tel]at any time.
NP. I look forward to hearing from you soon.

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