If this comes from Bradley ( http://www.shakespeare-navigators.com/bradley/tr14.html), do it more accurate next time you quote something. You have to focus on the main points of the original text and put hair on it in your own words as much as possible. Repeating it all over again is pointless.
I followed the original lines from Bradley to get the main idea ( from that link above) and some of yours.
>>Shakespeare also introduces the supernatural into some of his tragedies; he introduces ghosts, and witches who have supernatural knowledge. ( original from Bradley)
‘Think’ of the inclusion of supernatural force that is often present in Shakespeare's works.... the appearance of both the ghost and the witch in Hamlet and Macbeth respectively.
>>The supernatural elements might NOT ALWAYS be explainED as aN illusion of the character’S mind.
You have to paraphrase it, not to repeat. The main characters see these ghosts and witches but not because they’ve eaten too many magic shrooms but simply because these nasty creatures are constantly around in the play.
Put it into words.
>>The supernatural is always very closeLY connected with THE characterS and influenceS on THE future actions and thoughts. Better , though still repetitive.
>>It gives a confirmation and a distinct form to inward movements already present and exerting an influence; to the sense of failure in Brutus, to the stifled workings of conscience in Richard, to the half-formed thought or the horrified memory of guilt in Macbeth, to suspicion in Hamlet ( original from Bradley)
Think of a word’ intrinsic’ here. That the supernatural is in fact that essential force that may trigger those plights and quandaries the characters are going through.
>>This influence is never of a compulsive kind. It creates AN important element in the problem which the hero has to face and we do not notice that it HAS removed his capacity or responsibility to deal with problem.
Again, mostly repetition. But the original line conveys a bit different message, “It forms no more than an element, however important, in the problem which the hero has to face; and we are never allowed to feel that it has removed his capacity or responsibility for dealing with this problem.” = it doesn’t create an element, even if it’s important, ..