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Florence dreamt almost every night about the same. Mysterious castle appeared in all her dreams. She had never been in the castle she dreamt about, but in her dreams she felt as if she belongs there. Something attracted her and she couldn’t manage with it. When once she woke up during the night, she knew that something is wrong. She wasn’t surprised when she realized that she doesn’t feel her legs. Something controlled her legs and commanded her to leave the house. She went outside without even shoes.
In her dream she had seen the young woman in beautiful white dress and now Florence was sure that she “is” the beauty from her dreams. When she arrived to castle Florence’s feet was whole in the blood, but she doesn’t felt any pain. Something commanded her to go to the basement, but when she arrived there she had passed out.
She woke up the morning in her own bed, but she hadn’t been able to remember how she gets here. She looked at her feet and then she knows that it wasn’t just a dream. Florence dressed up and ran through the forest, the way which she remembered from the dream. When she found the castle immediately went to the basement. She screamed when she saw a skeleton in beautiful white dress. When she calmed down she called the police. After few weeks it turned out that the young woman from the basement was Florence’s relative, which had disappeared in the day of wedding 200 years ago.
Florence dreamt almost every night about the same THING. (przedimek) mysterious castle appeared in all her dreams. She had never been in the castle she dreamt about, but in her dreams she felt as if she belonED there. Something attracted her and she couldn’t 'manage with it' (cos tu nie tak) . When once she woke up during the night, she knew that something 'is' WAS wrong. She wasn’t surprised when she realized that she 'doesn’t' COULD NOT feel her legs.
She went outside 'without even shoes' (a jaie jest slowo na ludzi ktorzy chodza bez butow?).
In her dream she had seen 'the' A young woman in (przedimek) beautiful white dress and now Florence was sure that she “'is' WAS” the beauty from her dreams. When she arrived 'to' (zle slowo, tutaj potrzeba 2, jeden z nich to jest przedimek) castle Florence’s feet 'was' (ale 'feet' to sa 2 rzeczy tutaj l. mn) 'whole' (zle slowo) in 'the' (niepotr) blood, but she 'doesn’t' (zly czas - tutasj opowiadasz, to DID NOT) 'felt' FEEL any pain. Something commanded her to go to the basement, but when she arrived there she 'had' (niepotr) passed out.
She woke up the NEXT morning in her own bed, but she 'hadn’t been' COULD NOT remember 'able' (niepotr) 'to remember' (niepotr) how she gOT 'here' THERE. She looked at her feet and then she 'knows' KNEW (uzywasz 'looked' co jest czasem przeszlym, a pozniej zmieniasz na terazniejszy - consistency!) that it wasn’t just a dream. Florence dressed 'up' (niepotr, 'dressing' to jest cos, a 'dressing up' to calkowicie cos innego) and ran through the forest, the way which she remembered from the dream. When she found the castle (przecinek) 'immediately' (nie w tym miejscu) SHE went IMMEDIATELY to the basement. She screamed when she saw a skeleton in (przedimek) beautiful white dress.
After (przedimek) few weeks it turned out that the young woman from the basement was Florence’s relative, 'which' WHO - bo tutaj mowa o czlowieku) had disappeared 'in' ON the day of HER wedding 200 years ago.

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