According to some researches (lepiej po prostu: RESEARCH, bez "some"),
more than 90% of kids have
a possibility to use (lepiej to zmienić na DOSTĘP DO) the Internet.
In one (lepiej: EVERY) minute 300
thousands (bez 's') people are logging into (Present Simple) their Facebook accounts and another 100
thousands (jak wyżej) are adding (Present Simple) new “tweets”. Since (przedimek) 90’(s), (przedimek) Internet has slowly
became (gramatyka) the main
source for (lepiej: MEANS OF) quick (lepiej: FAST) communication. However, finding new friends online without (dodaj: PROPER) consideration may turn against you..
We can’t (w esejach lepiej używać pełnych form: CANNOT) imagine life without the Internet. First of all, we can send a message to our friend in
no-time (raczej osobno), and for free..
There’s (skrót - jak wyżej, poza tym nie liczba pojedyncza, bo dalej masz "borderds") no borders, so if we want to find a new pen-friend from (przedimek) foreign country to improve our speaking or writing skills, we only need (przedimek) few minutes to find one. A
vary (to czasownik, potrzebujesz rzeczownik) of chat-rooms gives us (przedimek) opportunity to share our thoughts, hobbies or problems. What is more, (przedimek) Internet gives us a sense of freedom by being
an anonymous.
The other side (know about us only informations - SZYK WYRAZÓW!! Poza tym information jest niepoliczalnym rzeczownikiem) we gave (raczej Present Simple) to them.
On the other hand, you can also face many unfriendly people
, (raczej bez przecinka) who overuse this freedom.
Furthermore, (przedimek) lot of teenagers spend too much time talking with online friends, neglecting the real ones.
To sum up, communication by (przedimek) Internet is a great invention, which lets us save our time, but must be used with proper consideration. We have to think before we share our personal
informations (jak wyżej)
to (złe słowo - WITH) a new friend.