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All parents always have a problem of reconciling work and childcare. I strongly believe that a part-time job is the best option for someone wo is a working parents.

In the first place, they have more time, which they may spend with their childrens. For example they may help them in homework or play with them. Childrens will be better marks, may develop their talent. Moreover childrens, who are quarted by their parents do not fall into the wrong crowd.

Furthermore, parents less pay for kindergarden. They save money and they may spend it on toys for childrens, holidays or new household appliances. What is more, they may put this money on the account. When their children will be adult, he will have money on start in adult life.

On the other hand, part-time job is less pay than full-time job. Parents would have a problem with money. It would can by too little on life, so parents sometimes have to refuse children’s craving. Moreover, in the future they wll have low retirement, so difficult will be help their family.

Taking everything into account, part-time job is good solution for working parents. They have mor time for childrens. They earn money not reglecting their children.

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część by można.

someone wo
is a working parents
Childrens will be better marks
Moreover childrens, + przecinek źle
quarted
fall into the wrong crowd > to wyrażenie trochę inaczej...
parents less pay > szyk
When their children will be adult > takie sobie koślawe?
he will have money > kto?
money on start in adult life > średniawka
is less pay > tak nie
It would can by too little on life, > what? niezrozumiałe
refuse children’s craving > coś nie tak
so difficult will be > tak nie
is ___ good solution > po tym łatwo poznać ludzi ze wschodniej Europy (i nie tylko)
They have mor time > did you mean: mordor?
reglecting > what's reglecting?

All parents always have a problem of reconciling work and cildcare. I strongly believe that a part-time job is the best option for someone for is a working parent.

In the first place, they have more time, which they may spend with their cild. For example they may help them in homework or play with them, will better marks, may develop their talent. Moreover, who are quarted by their parents do not fall into the crowd wrong.

Furthermore, parents pay less for kindergarden. They save money and they may spend it on toys for childrens, holidays or new houselold appliances. What is more, they may put this money on the account. In the future their children will be adult, children will have money on start in adult life.

On the other hand, part-time job is pay less than full-time job. Parents would have a problem with money. They may have not enough money, so parents sometimes have to refuse children’s whim. Moreover, in the future they wll have low retirement, so difficult will help their family.

Taking everything into account, part-time job is a good solution for working parents. They have more time for childrens. They earn money not neglecting their children.

cildcare?
for someone for is a working parent > miałaś literówkę tylko, a teraz jest niezrozumiałe
cild?
will better marks??
quarted??
not fall into the crowd wrong > jeszcze gorzej. poszukaj tego wyrażenia, a nie zgaduj
childrens??
their children will be adult, children will have money on start > całe do poprawki
is pay less > tak się nie mówi
They may have not enough money > szyk
children’s whim > jedno widzimisię?
so difficult will help their family > nie poprawiłaś tego, nadal jest niezrozumiałe
___ part-time job is a good solution
childrens?? > po raz enty

All parents always have a problem of reconciling work and childcare. I strongly believe that a part-time job is the best option for someone who is a working parent.

In the first place, they have more time, which they may spend with their child. For example they may help them in homework or play with them, they will have better marks, may develop their talent. Moreover, who are keeping an eye on their parents do not falling in the wrong crowd.

Furthermore, parents pay less for kindergarden. They save money and they may spend it on toys for children, holidays or new houselold appliances. What is more, they may put this money on the account. In the future children will be adult and they will have money on start in adult life.

On the other hand, part-time job is less paid than full-time job. Parents would have a problem with money. They may not have enough money, so parents sometimes have to refuse children’s whims. Moreover, in the future they will have low retirement, so help their family will be difficult.

Taking everything into account, a part-time job is a good solution for working parents. They have more time for children. They earn money not neglecting their children.

jakby teraz ktoś mógł okiem rzucic

reconciling work WITH childcare
Moreover, who are keeping an eye on their parents do not falling in the wrong crowd <~~~zupelnie źle, co chciales napisać?
kindergarten
put the money into an account
so helping ...

Napisz .....part time praca placi mniej ...../w takim szyku i czasie/;)

chciałem napisać "dzieci, które są pilnowane przez rodziców nie wpadną w złe towarzystwo"

All parents always have a problem of reconciling work with childcare. I strongly believe that a part-time job is the best option for someone who is a working parent.

In the first place, they have more time, which they may spend with their child. For example they may help them in homework or play with them, they will have better marks, may develop their talent. Moreover, who are keeping an eye on their parents do not falling in the wrong crowd.

Furthermore, parents pay less for kindergarten. They save money and they may spend it on toys for children, holidays or new houselold appliances. What is more, they may put this money on the account. In the future children will be adult and they will have money on start in adult life.

On the other hand, part-time job is paying less than full-time job. Parents would have a problem with money. They may not have enough money, so parents sometimes have to refuse children’s whims. Moreover, in the future they will have low retirement, so helping their family will be difficult.

Taking everything into account, a part-time job is a good solution for working parents. They have more time for children. They earn money not neglecting their children.