discursive essay- proszę o sprawdzenie :)

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Over a 100 years, the world will be changed in many aspects of human life. Personally I think that the biggest progress will be seen in the public health.

Considering all the researches that are in progress, it’s highly probable, that many of the incurable and mortal diseases will be defeated. By the studies on viruses such as HIV or Ebola the scientists will be able to create an effective vaccine or a medicine that will manage to eliminate the virus from the patient’s body completely. Perhaps even cancer will be curable, by creating and popularizing pharmaceuticals based on amigdalin which is considered to be a cancer cure.

People’s lifestyle will also change. Their diet will be more balanced. Not only choosing health food rather than fast food will be more popular, but also practicing morning exercises.

Supposing that the pace of our lives won’t slow down, I imagine that the number of people that will be suffering from depression will be higher than ever. Moreover, due to the constant stress, majority of people will be plagued by afflictions such as insomnia, neurosis and self-destructive behaviours. The number of suicides, especially among the young people in their schooldays, will rapidly increase because of the ridiculous education system, overwhelming pressure and exorbitant requirements that they will face.

To sum up, within a 100 years medicine will be a lot more advanced and future researches will improve our living standards as well as elongate our lifespan. Regretfully, we won’t be able to enjoy our lives because of the burden of depression and other mental health conditions.
the public health - przedimek niepotrzebny
cure for cancer
Supposing = if, czy po if dajemy will w zdaniach warunkowych?
Over a 100 years, the world will be changed .... ponad 100 lat .... osobiście nie dałbym A przed 100;)
"Within a 100 years" albo "A 100 years from now" będzie lepiej pasowało? "A" zostawię, bo w poleceniu tak było ;) Względem tego supposing, to powinno w takim razie być "Supposing that the pace of our lives doesn't slow down", czy jeszcze inaczej?
to z supposing ok
Dziękuję :)
'Over' (zle slowo - njak juz bylo wyzej pisane) a 100 years, the world will 'be' (zle slowo) changed in many aspects of human life. Personally I think that the biggest progress will be seen in 'the' (niepotr) public health.

Considering all the 'researches' (tutaj l. poj) that 'are' (zle slowo) in progress, it’s highly probable, that many of the incurable and mortal diseases will be defeated. 'By the studies' (cos mi tu niegra) on viruses such as HIV or Ebola the scientists will be able to create an effective vaccine or a medicine that will manage to eliminate (tutaj daj 'completely') the virus from the patient’s body 'completely' (w zlym miejscu).
People’s 'lifestyle' (people tutaj jest l. mnoga) will also change.

Supposing 'that' (wg mnie to jest zle slowo, i wg niepotr) the pace of our lives won’t slow down, I imagine that the number of people that will 'be suffering' (nie za bardzo, ale moze byc) from depression will be higher than ever. Moreover, due to 'the' (wg mnie niepotr) constant stress, (brak przedimka) majority of people will be plagued by afflictions such as insomnia, neurosis and self-destructive behaviours. The number of suicides, especially among the young people 'in their schooldays' (cos tu nie tak), will rapidly increase because of the ridiculous education system, overwhelming pressure and exorbitant requirements that they will face.

To sum up, within 'a' (niepotr) 100 years medicine will be 'a lot' (prosze uzyc inne slowo-na wyzszym szczeblu, wiecej formalne) more advanced and future 'researches' (zmien) will improve our living standards as well as elongate our lifespan.
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