I am an IT professional with extensive (to znaczy ile lat? 2, 10? 15? trzeba napisac ) experience in the areas of network and systems administration, network infrastructure design(,) (nie potrzeba przecinka jak masz 'and' po tym) and project management.
Furthermore, I am able to apply academic knowledge combined with my passion for informatics 'to field more productively' (cos tutaj tego nie rozumiem).
I 'also have' (zla kolejnosc slow...have also) achieved consistent and remarkable (tzn jakie? 40, 50, 70 procent - trzeba napisac) results in (brak przedimka THE) execution and completion of IT solutions projects.
'On the other hand' (nie, to calkowicie tutaj nie pasuje, mozesz dodac...In addition) I have a variety of leadership, communications, motivational, team building(,) (znowu ten przecinek przed 'and' on jest niepotr) and analytical skills (EVIDENCE, mozesz dodac which was obtained during my X years working for X) .
I enjoy helping and inspiring diverse groups (podaj przyklady) to work towards a common goal,using my ability to understand, negotiate(,) (znowu ten przecinek ktory jest niepotr) and resolve conflicting needs.
Teraz ok, tylko kazde zdania gdzie pasuje powinno byc poparte 'dowodami' ze to umiesz i robiles.